Hi everyone! Melody here, I'm a new indie writer. I self published my first book this past June. I used a editor and she helped me realize that I had a habit of head-hopping, and I did my best to fix that in the story before I released it. I thought I had it, but one review so far said I still did it. I want to perfect my writing. I want to use any constructive criticism to only become better. My editor told me if you are switching POV you need to make a break to make it clear who is talking. I tried very hard to only break once a chapter, so most chapters have each character's POV. I know I am not the greatest at spelling or grammar, but that is why I used an editor. I have concerns about this review that I posted below. She still gave me a 4 out of 5, but I want to make sure I understand the POV problem she is addressing. I looked up a lot of info about third person omniscient and third person limited. But if anyone can shed more light on that topic, I would be appreciative. I can post or attach a sample of my book if anyone wants. It is out and published, but I'm publishing a second book in October and want to make sure what this review really meant, and how to avoid this in book #2. No one else has brought this to my attention and I'm interested in more reviews to see if anyone else points this out. For now I will go do research on these two POVs while I await comments, suggestions and help. Thanks everyone!
The writing style is simple and easy to read for the most part. The only thing that threw me was that the story has head hopping, otherwise known as third person omniscient, and also has breaks in the middle of scenes. These types of mid-scene breaks are usually reserved for stories told in third person limited as a signal that the POV has switched from one character to the other, so they felt unnatural and unnecessary to me in a third person omniscient story.
I want to perfect my writing. I want to use any constructive criticism to only become better.
My editor told me if you are switching POV you need to make a break to make it clear who is talking. I tried very hard to only break once a chapter, so most chapters have each character's POV.
I know I am not the greatest at spelling or grammar, but that is why I used an editor.
I have concerns about this review that I posted below. She still gave me a 4 out of 5, but I want to make sure I understand the POV problem she is addressing. I looked up a lot of info about third person omniscient and third person limited. But if anyone can shed more light on that topic, I would be appreciative. I can post or attach a sample of my book if anyone wants. It is out and published, but I'm publishing a second book in October and want to make sure what this review really meant, and how to avoid this in book #2. No one else has brought this to my attention and I'm interested in more reviews to see if anyone else points this out.
For now I will go do research on these two POVs while I await comments, suggestions and help.
Thanks everyone!
The writing style is simple and easy to read for the most part. The only thing that threw me was that the story has head hopping, otherwise known as third person omniscient, and also has breaks in the middle of scenes. These types of mid-scene breaks are usually reserved for stories told in third person limited as a signal that the POV has switched from one character to the other, so they felt unnatural and unnecessary to me in a third person omniscient story.