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Loki ~ If you can dream it, you can do it (lokithegr8) | 4 comments This is where I write. Constructive criticism please.


Loki ~ If you can dream it, you can do it (lokithegr8) | 4 comments SINGLE FOREVER
I'm single for life
I can't find love
I seem without strife
But I want love

It would make happy
to see someone around
that makes me happy
And always makes a sound

That when I'm sad cheers me up
With an I love you
And here's a cup
Of whatever she made
to make me feel better
Someone who won't fade
And loves me to the letters
Of my name

But that's not me I'm forever alone
Here I sit
Eating an icecream cone

No one loves me
And that's not OK
So don't listen
No matter what I say


message 3: by Anahita (new)

Anahita (anahitasn) | 17 comments That's really sad, but I can totally relate to all of it.


message 4: by Chloe (new)

Chloe Fray (bowtiesandtrenchcoats) | 46 comments That was cute! but maybe try to work on the flow of your stanzas a little.


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