✎ Just Keep Writing ✐ discussion

I suppose this will be where I post my writing and stuff. I'll probably post song lyrics and quotes that I like. I usually write poetry or short stories, any feedback is encouraged. Thanks guys!

Okay here's my first poem I'll post here I guess. I don't know if I really like it (there's one line I just can't get right *smh*) I'm not good at naming poems so none of my writings have names...


You ripped out my heart
And it swallowed it whole
Then you reached for my lungs
And my breath is what you stole
After skinning my body
And leaving me bear
You smirked, walked away
And just left me there
You moved on from me
And I can say honestly
There's a hole in my chest
Where my heart ought to be
I watched as you gently
Played with her hair
And I let out a breath
That was never there
Love is something, they say
That one can never replace
Jealousy moved over
And hate took her place.

oooh I love it ^.^ this is so perfect!

Wow. Really great metaphors there. I loved it

Aha that's guys!

Aha thanks guys!

I realized I haven't posted very much on my own thread so I'm gonna post a few right now. Again most of them don't have titles because I don't know what to name my poems. Enjoy:)

I sing too loud
Even though I know I'm not good

I laugh too hard
Even though it wasn't that funny

I open up
Even though I know you don't care

I get comfortable with people too easily
Even though I know they won't stay

If I open up
You better run
Because after that
I get attached.

They think I'm happy
I'm smiling it's true
But my smile is shallow
They should see right through
I've tried to show it
They don't see I'm dead
So my demons aren't hungry
They're very well fed
They think I can handle
What's thrown at my head
But I can't
So I hide
I stay in my bed
They tell me I'm strong
So I stopped lifting their burdens
"The eyes are the windows to the soul"
Well I've closed the curtains
It doesn't matter, I guess
That my life is a mess
And if I'm the only that can clean it
Does that mean I can't feel it?

Wow I totally relate to that one :)

Aww thanks Jenna!

You ripped out my heart
And it swallowed it whole
Then you reached for my lungs
And my breath is what you stole
After skinning my body
And leaving me bear
You smirked, walked away
And just left me there
You moved on from me
And I can say honestly
There's a hole in my chest
Where my heart ought to be
I watched as you gently
Played with her hair
And I let out a breath
That was never there
Love is something, they say
That one can never replace
Jealousy moved over
And hate took her place.

Okay I don't particularly like this one, but I supposed I'll post it here too. This is the last one I'll post tonight. Thanks guys! :)



The world is not real
It's not meant for your eyes
You're not meant to feel
For it will be your demise
They told me to lie
Well dress up the truth
Make life not so harsh
On the young souls of youth
So here come my chance
I watch it fly by
I reach for it's wings
Guess I'll give it a try