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October-November 2014 Contest > "Example" - October-November 2014 Contest

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Lena (lenakarynn) | 1526 comments Mod
Here's my example, to give you a picture of the diversity there can be. It's not as long as your requirement (this is 333 words, to give you an idea of length), but I wrote this a couple months ago, not for this contest.

Forgiveness
(Inspired by "Forgiveness" by TobyMac)

I saw two men on a hill. One was robed in white shining brighter than the sun. The other was cloaked in black, void of all light. Beneath them the whole world was stretched, bathed in the light of the Bright One. Then the Dark One stepped between the world and its Light. His shadow began spreading across the earth. I saw the people shrink from it in terror, until one, seeing the lush fruits that grew in the Shade, stepped into it. I saw the Bright One bow His head, and a tear fell from His eyes. From the tear sprang the image of the Bright One, nailed to a cross, between the Dark and the Light. I saw the Dark One with a hammer in his hand, and a basket of nails at his side. Each time someone stepped into the Shade, he drove a nail into the Man on the tree. I saw the people in the Shade, some of them trying to get out, to go back to the Light, but they could not escape, as surely as the Man was nailed to the cross.
I looked, and the Man's face was a mixture of agony and love, as I heard Him say, "Forgive them. Father. For they know not what they do." He sank down, on the cross, until he lay stretched out on the ground. And the Bright One reached His hand across the body of the Man, bringing Light to the earth again. And as the hand stretched out, the Man rose, free of the cross, and stepped out toward the people below. His pierced body intensified the Light from the Bright One. As it flowed through Him, I saw it blind the Dark One, and burn him and his followers to ashes, yet it rested gently on the people who ran to it, giving them Light, and Warmth, and Security. And I saw them bask in its joyful rays.


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