Lyrical discussion

Hey guys! Shine is helping a newbie out here in how to grow a group :'D Heh. Well, here is a thread JUST for your lyrics!! If you have songs/lyrics/poems you have and love that you can't enter into a competition, now's the time to post. Just remember, little tidbits you like in your lyrics can go into the Catchwords thread, not here to clutter it up. :) Thanks.
Cheers! -Lana

Oooo, that's wonderful. I have so many to share ;)

I love that, Cherie, my sis!

Cherie..do you play any instruments or have tunes to your songs?

Yep. But I will let her answer in detail for herself. ;D

Yes!! I would love to hear some of your songs!!!

I'm actually here to look for input....lol. I know my stuff sucks.


An american state of mind
Yeah, yeah
Ayo, Christians, it's time.
It's time, Christians (aight, Christians, begin).
Straight out the holy dungeons of rap.

The Saviour drops deep as does my bar.
I never eat, 'cause to eat is the mother of star.
Beyond the walls of priests, life is defined.
I think of God when I'm in an american state of mind.

Hope the car got some star.
My r don't like no dirty avatar.
Run up to the spar and get the far.

In an american state of mind.
What more could you ask for? The yummy Saviour?
You complain about Haters.
I gotta love it though - somebody still speaks for the savior.

I'm rappin' to the map,
And I'm gonna move your sap.

Ugly, wet, entertaining, like a Bible
Boy, I tell you, I thought you were a pibal.

I can't take the Haters, can't take the key.
I woulda tried to run I guess I got no c.

I'm rappin' to the sap,
And I'm gonna move your map.

Yea, yaz, in an american state of mind.

When I was young my mother had a wrybill.
I waz kicked out without no tribal.
I never thought I'd see that pibal.
Ain't a soul alive that could take my mother's libel.

A quiet chord is quite the board.

Thinking of God. Yaz, thinking of God (God).

Oh guys :P Here is my first song I talked about in the chat. It's pretty slave-to-the-routine, because I wasn't as wild and creative then- I didn't really know how. Forgive the repetitiveness! >w<

Message Of Surrender

Do I forget it ever happened?
These painful memories in my head..
So many crazy decisions
Will there ever be an end?

And I say..

Okay! Lord, take it all from here!
Hello, sunshine, goodbye fear!
This is my message of surrender
How could I have not remembered.

Getting dragged down by the stress
Feeling so lonely and depressed
keep tryin' to do this on my own
(but I)
Forget to trust in God alone

Okay! Lord, take it all from here!
Hello, sunshine, goodbye fear!
This is my message of surrender
How could I have not remembered.

God, I need your help to stand
(And know that)
Everything is in your hands
You got us here, this far, somehow
So why am I doubting now..!

When will you get the message?
I don't have the answers to all of your questions
I don't have the cure to your depression
I can't take away your sorrow
or promise that a better day's tomorrow..
But I can say...!

Okay! Lord, take it all from here!
Hello, sunshine, goodbye fear!
This is my message of surrender
How could I have not remembered.


So...wipe your tired eyes
God is with you, you don't have to cry
Hang on, don't hang on to that stress
I know you've got big plans, but who knows best?

Okay! Lord, take it all from here!
Hello, sunshine, goodbye fear!
This is my message of surrender
How could I have not remembered :)

This is wonderful, Cherie! I can tell you really poured your heart into that song, "When Jesus Turned on The Light".

Drowning in buckets of noise
Waiting for nothing till I hear your voice

Feel my heart
sha-tter-ing
in my chest.

Each
a-gon-nizing.
breath.
I.
take!!

Soaking in pain,
bleeding and aching
inside of my mind
torturing, shaking
Suffering, hating
the way I'm created
capturing faceless..

(To be continued!! ^-^)

'Til it is Over

Hold on, hold on, until you see the victory claimed
and the longed for prize
finally gained.
The battle is not yet won
But we shall one day overcome.

We shall one day stand within the pearly gates
And at last see Jesus
face to face.
It won't be long 'til we hear the trumpet's song
But until then- we must keep on!

Fight our battles with His mighty power
that is in us every moment,
every hour.
Wait on, trust on!

And someday when our fight is finished
we will be caught up in the sky;
We shall be with the everlasting One-
forever, there on high.

So fight on!
'Til the war is over, and done!

-January 2017

Ah, thank you☺️

Ooo, thank you Leyla.☺️

Cherie wrote: "When Jesus Turned The Light On

Well, life was cold and life was dark
And I felt plunged beneath the waves
I couldn't breathe I couldn't swim
I couldn't see. I tried to get above the waves
But one ..."

It sounds pretty cool too. Can't get it out of my head since I heard it at YouTube. Just a suggestion but if you don't put the lyrics actually in the video, maybe print them beneath so people can read along as you sing. Just IMHO (which is always 100% accurate).

I had to ask that question too and I thought everyone knew but me. You've made me feel so good about myself again.

I was told it meant: In My Humble Opinion (which, as you already know is ALWAYS 100% ACCURATE!!!) 😉

Nice!

Cool! I kinda want to try to write some lyrics but I've never done it before so I don't really know how

AWESOME Anna!! Before I started, I just assumed I couldn't. And when I eventually wrote a verse, I got hooked. It's in my brain all day, it's the way I think, my mindset, I literally look at things differently now.
I can't wait to see what you'll come up with, and like I told some people before, you can make up your own lyrics to a song that already exists like *coughs* Alec Benjamin *coughs* Mind Is A Prison. :)

*coughs* Best song ever *coughs*


Not a bad idea! That's cool!

I tried writing some lyrics to Alec Benjamin's song, The Water Fountain, and I used the instrumental version. I don't think they're very good at all but it definitely was fun and I want to try more!! XD

Also it's kinda silly, about how no one understands me sometimes XD LOLOLOLOL

O_O Annnnnaaa show us!! The suspense!!

Seriously they need LOTS of work...Idk. XD
It's a bit repetitive of the time, as well. BUT MAYBE I JUST NEED TO DO MORE!!! XD
I'll have to share them tomorrow or late tonight, anyway. Unable to get to my computer. But yeah. I'm so new to all of this!

Here is my weird lame song(first one ever) : (view spoiler)[

I wish that I could escape here
Wish I would be understood soon
Stuck in chains that nobody sees
Want to break free out of my mind
If I stay I surely will die
Inside that caged mind of mine
Locked away the rest of my life
Hiding alone for no one to see

Both hands are out
Lips screaming loud
Please let me free
All that I want is
You to understand me and my pain
I am sorry I just need time

Crying, crying, crying, tears on my cheeks
I want to escape but I don’t know how...I don’t know... I don’t know how…
Calling, calling, calling, voice is loud
Trying to make my-self under-stood I don’t know how...I don’t...know how....I don’t...know how….

I guess that life is a cage
Trying to keep you contained
I wish I had tried harder
To free myself and my mind
I need someone to know why
I’m still trapped inside of my brain
Tried to claw my way outside
It did nothing still here alone

Both hands were out
Lips screaming loud
Please let me free
All that I wanted
You understanding me and my pain
I am sorry I needed more time

Crying, crying, crying, tears on my cheeks
I want to escape but I don’t know how...I don’t... I don’t know how…
Calling, calling, calling, voice was loud
Trying to make my-self under-stood I don’t know how...I don’t...know how....I don’t...know how…
Crying, crying, crying, tears on my cheeks
Calling, calling, calling, voice was loud it was...it was so loud…
Sinking, sinking, sinking, inside my-self, I am finally dying, dying now, it’s no use, I am no more
I wish that I had you here with me...

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Here is the song that it goes to: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8iqGA...

I'd say that all credit goes to Alec Benjamin but I don't know if he'd appreciate that XDDDD
Also um it might sound super similar to his My Mind is a Prison.

Anna! NO, I love this. And I don't say say that I don't mean, and no I'm not faking positivity. It feels so... raw, genuine and vivid in my mind, it captures desperateness. You call it lame, but I see true emotions in this, and I spot a unique writing style already. I especially like the "Stuck in chains that nobody sees".

😂😂 I'm glad you like it! I've never shared something that personal about myself and then I just put it in LYRICS!😂

Very well written, Anna!

Thanks, Faith!

Love it Anna!

Thanks!

Beautiful, Leyla! ❤
he must have been wonderful.....
And you really only saw him one time, and you don't know his name??? That is so dreamy...☺️

Awww that's really sweet! I love it so much!!!!!!!

If you feel comfortable sharing it would be interesting to listen to.

You're welcome! Okay!

Awwww 😍 That's so sweet!! That guy was really awesome!

Oooohhhhooooo, that is darling, Leyla❤
You are such a good storyteller, too☺️☺️

beautifully done, too☺️❤

That was so sweet, Le'Kiss!

I wrote this song for my friend yesterday, I'm extremely worried about him, and I just don't know what to do. I'll never actually show him this though, lol.


Only, 14, getting verbally abused
from his father, left a scar
but you can never find a bruise
He, started out quiet
deep thinking, calm and mature
But he always went unnoticed
made a change to insecure
Turned, into a charmer
ladies man and extrovert
Taped, over the pain
didn't show how much it hurt.
Well, here I am and I can never find the words..
to tell him

I'm not gonna pretend
like I understand
What's going on right now,
is hurting pretty bad.
I'm just gonna show you
gonna let you know there's more to
any of those words that your dad said.

You're
not
giving
up
just
yet.

Lana wrote: "I wrote this song for my friend yesterday, I'm extremely worried about him, and I just don't know what to do. I'll never actually show him this though, lol.


Only, 14, getting verbally abused
from..."

Oh my goodness Lana.....wow. This song is so good; it shows not only what your friend is going through, but it shows it from the perspective of an outsider, of a friend. I can see your guys' friendship shining through in the comfort and encouragement you offer. I'm so sorry about your friend:( Keep being the good, loving friend you are to him, and just show the love of Christ💜

Yeah.. It's kind of long and complicated, but I don't hit off with his "new self" that much. We aren't on speaking terms, no matter what I say, it's just been really bothering me. His life is so hard right now, and he just pretends, but what I REALLY HATE, is that a lot of people like his "new self" better, and all the girls give him tons of attention. Only a select few know or like the way he really is.... I'm not even sure what to think of it anymore...

Oh, dear Lana.... I am so sorry. It is so so hard when you see your friends change. I have seen it many times, and it breaks my heart. Sometimes I have thought, could have I done more to help? Could I have somehow prevented what happened?
I will praying for him, Lana, and you. For him that God may draw him to Himself and that he will turn to God; for you, that your heart will be healed, and that Jesus' love and righteousness would shine through you...❤

If I understand, this is where we post lyrics that aren't for a specific competition.

I've prayed for a guitar. I had to get rid of mine years ago when my roommate's cats peed on it. Repeatedly.

Now, with my paralysis I don't even know if I can still move my hands enough to play. But God said, "You have not because you ask not." And I'm still getting the music and lyrics into my head, so I'm taking that as a good sign.

Here are some more lyrics that just JUMPED out! I thought I would share them with you because you've become good friends and it's nice to share.

Thank you, my Lord Jesus, for giving us music and for allowing me to be inspired by all the people here. And for the treasure chest of encouragement you have hidden away in this secret place of Goodreads. Amen!


Speak, Lord. Your Servant Listens

I knew a man
He listened with his all
He watched every blink
He'd give a second think
He heard your heart's call

I knew a man
He saw each one's worth
He leaned near as you spoke
He never showed he was broke
Until he left the earth

I knew a woman
She blabbed beyond the clock
She had a tongue untamed
She never cared to know the name
Of the Man who couldn't talk

Lana wrote: "I wrote this song for my friend yesterday, I'm extremely worried about him, and I just don't know what to do. I'll never actually show him this though, lol.


Only, 14, getting verbally abused
from..."

Wow...that is so deep...I hope he'll be okay. Keep sticking by his side and being the sweet girl you are. That's the most important thing in a friendship, especially when things are so hard.

"So, take this lump of clay!
Take this heart and take this life!
And make what You will with us"

How true. That's definitely one to ponder! Not merely a lyric. A prayer. Well done Cherie.

LL

Le'Kiss wrote: "I was little when this happened, so it won't be very detailed. (Sorry) I was in school and I decided to go to the library before it closed. Well after I got my book and was leaving I completely for..."

I was just reading that Bible verse about sometimes we are " entertaining angel unawares". Hmmm. It must have been scary to be lost.
LL

https://music.apple.com/ca/album/this...

Just doing a TEÇHNOLOGICAL test to see if this music link will work. Just ignore me! 😀
LL

If the LINK works for anyone else could you leave a comment here? Thanks everyone!
Love LL

Yeah I can go to the link, but I can't play more than 30 seconds of the song since I didn't buy it.

Works for me! All the songs sound good, too.