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Amanda Artist Cat
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Oct 27, 2020 01:01AM
Here you go, Ambuja! :)
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https://www.goodreads.com/story/show/...Hi!💕
So, I've written this short story and I have been trying to improve on my writing skills and some tips on that would be great! Please feel free to offer constructive criticism and reviews:)
I'm just curious as to who the assistant is? Also I'm just wondering why you chose 3:03 am, is there some significance to that?
At the end of the story maybe you should have the character's reaction to her finding out that she's the one who committed these murders, because I feel like that way it would be more satisfying.
I think the idea is really nice! Also I was very much surprised with the ending.
Hello Avantika, Thank you so much for the suggestion! 303 is the patient's number in the story and also the time the patient is stuck in:) The assistant here refers to the artificial intelligence in a smartphone but you can also presume that it is actually the voice of someone in the reality that she can hear in her hallucination.
The character is in a loop of sorts, they fictionalize their murders and regret over them and when they come closest to reality they sink back into it.
I decided to keep more of it open-ended to find different perspectives of the readers, I'll try and keep a more decisive ending next time :D Thank you for the suggestion!
