Scribere discussion

Okay, it is me, now here is a couple of warnings to people who are thinking at looking at my poems, I write erratically, so that means sometimes I won't write for months then make 5 at once, another concern is that well to put it simply I write about death a lot, that is one of my themes, and I don't act like death is a bad thing, I talk about death as a mercy so that has caused problems before and one last thing, this has not happened often but when ever I write about religion (Christianity mostly) lets just say that I hate it to its very core so if your religious and are easily offended then maybe don't go further

The calm ocean still
Empty of waves with nothing
Stirring the great sea

However beneath
The waves a different story
Is shown to happen

Creatures of brilliant
Colours of such beauty and
Diverse quality

Swimming together
In an endless flurry of
Emerald and ruby

Scales of such shine that
They are like small gemstones set
In a endless dance

Small or large does not
Matter all of the creatures
Are magnificent

Darkness circles me
Twisting and turning inside
Of body and soul

My soul conflicts with
Itself as part of me wants
To give it all up

It wants to allow
The darkness to take over and
Sleep in dark silence

But it still fights on
Allowing it to stay to
And comfort the soul

When the light becomes
Too harsh and blinding for the
Body and needs sleep

Any feedback would be really good, thank you

Very good. I enjoy dark psychological imagery.

Thank you

A twisted dark vine
growing around a grand oak
up to its branches

While climbing it sets
its roots into the grand oak
tightening its grip

Now rooted into
the oak people started to
take care of the vine

People confused it
as part of the tree and part
of the tree grandness

As time pass people
start to think the vine
is more important

The tree starts dying
as the vine sucks the life from
it and starts to wilt

People started to see
the tree dying and wanted
to pull the vine out

But other people
beleived the vine was better
than the once grand tree

To this day the vine
still is with the tree and sucks
the life from it now

Ya, I agree with that :P

Thank you alot

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