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Apr 05, 2015 07:25PM
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This is amazing!!! Great word choice and flow at the whole shebang. :3
I fall in love with tragediesThe souls set ablaze
by each monster they've
tamed
You write beautifully, Alistair. :)
Alistair, awesome job. I see that you use more of a freestyle form rather than a rhyming pattern. If you don't mind if I be just a tad critical lol. The last line of the third and last stanza uses "in our eyes". It's still good, but makes it feel just a tad redundant.
Keep up writing! I'm proud of what you presented and hope to see more from you!
It's supposed to be that way. Tell 'im, AliBear. ._.
Yeah, what SoraBunny said :DI don't write poetry much. I'm still gettin the hang of it.
I'm surprised, you seem very experienced at writing!!!!
:3
:3
It's all good. Continue to learn and grow. You definitely have it in you. And I do apologize if I did offended you.
It's okay, you didn't offend me, Joseph
I'm inspired to post a few of my own. I haven't in some time.
I definitely will. I'll post it under my readings. Check it out when I'm done please?
Zion Viola wrote: "Alistair"Does you know this person
Zion Viola wrote: "Zion Viola wrote: "Alistair"Does you know this person"
Because I feel confused now
No. I don't know this person, SoraBunny
It seems a tiny bit creepy to me.But that's just me.
Me.
Lol sorry if it feels that way, Zion. I've been a part of this group for some time but haven't really checked in much. But I hope to do so a bit more, post some writings, and connect with other writers. That's all.
Sorry, I'm good at making things awkward. :o
U didn't SoraBunny. :)I saw why you were confused & thought it was creepy. In Joseph's comment he said he was proud of me without even knowing me. That's the awkward part really, not my SoraBunny.
Ooh, the last line sort of wrapped everything together! Nice job!
Oh, whoops, I ruined it. I meant this is good!!!
Oh, whoops, I ruined it. I meant this is good!!!
Can i be who i canWho i will
Who is still
roaming the earth to this day
Day by day way by way
Picking up the broken pieces
Of this heart
Heart of mine
But all i've learned from rehabilitation
Is rehab takes time
Well....I have not been here for a while .-.
It is really really good Alistar!!! Great job!
I like the first lines, and your word choice is absolutely phenomenal! :)
I like the first lines, and your word choice is absolutely phenomenal! :)
