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Hello book lovers.

I am a romance enthusiast who decided to try and write one myself.
I have recently uploaded my first ever attempt at writing a book which is both terrifying and exciting and I am hoping to find some volunteers who are able to provide honest reviews.
I am new to this group and whole industry in general so any feedback provided would be greatly appreciated!
Thank you in advance =D

Book description ~
When he found me I was broken, a shell of my former self. Going through the motions of life without really living it. Trauma lingered in my life like a shadow, creeping into my memories and invading my dreams, until he came along.
Jax Beckett barged into my world with his irresistible charm, endless patience, and those dangerously good looks that could make any woman weak in the knees.
He has me feeling emotions I thought were long gone. He shines a light into my otherwise dark existence, slowly helping me to rebuild myself with every intimate touch.
Could this be my chance at love?
It all seems a little too good to be true.

TRIGGER WARNING-
The following may be emotionally challenging for some individuals. Please be aware of this before proceeding.
This book contains scenes that may depict, mention, or discuss: anxiety, assault, physical abuse, rape, sexual abuse, sexual assault, sexual harassment.

Hi Margaux,

Congrats on your book! A very decent opening, I think :). I've read the dream sequence and up until the visitor arrives. Your writing is q. strong :)

A couple of notes for you: Your opening, which comprises your sample does suggest romatic erotica, so it's good that you've got that in your categories.

Fix your paragrpah spacing and indenting in the opening.

A note coming from me, the queen of typos! I suggest removing how your MC hates typos. You have at least one in your opening pages and a couple of past-tense misuses. My point is some readers will happily beat you over the head for having typos in the narrative of a character that singles them out for hatred! No need to hand them that big stick ;).

My main note is your cover. It screams "not romance". Well, "screams" is the wrong word, since it looks very flat and conveys nothing. Nonfiction if anything. Look at the covers from publishers and successful indie authors in your genres. You can find premade covers that might fit. Or get in touch with Rachel Bowdler. She was on Twitter. She's an author and also puts together decent covers for authors on a budget. I don't know her personally, but she was in my feed a lot ... before Elon kicked me off the platform! And I read a few of her books too :)

I hope that helps. I don't have KU currently but I will pop a review here on GR to say I've read the opening :).

Good luck!

Tierney wrote: "Hi Margaux,

Congrats on your book! A very decent opening, I think :). I've read the dream sequence and up until the visitor arrives. Your writing is q. strong :)

A couple of notes for you: Your o..."


I really appreciate your feedback! It truly means a lot to me.
I've taken all your constructive comments to heart and I'm actively working on them as I write this (talk about multitasking, right? ;) ).

A special thanks for your thoughts on the cover; I was aiming to steer clear of the typical shirtless guy vibe, but I totally get where you're coming from.

If you're interested, I'd be happy to send you the full version via email, but no pressure at all—I'm not one for aggressive marketing tactics.

Once again, thank you for taking the time to read the opening and share your valuable insights! =D

Margaux wrote: "Tierney wrote: "Hi Margaux,

Congrats on your book! A very decent opening, I think :). I've read the dream sequence and up until the visitor arrives. Your writing is q. strong :)

A couple of notes..."

You're v welcome, Margo :). I don't know much about covers, but I'd guess there's a happy medium somewhere between the shirtless cliche and what you have now.

Sure, email me the book--I'd like that. I'm at author.tierney.moore@gmail.com

Ciao :)