Future Authors discussion

The fmc of my book realises her man is using her and breaks ip w him, but she financially has nothing without her man,
So if her bf is not using her for money, what else could he be using her for?

Or I could change the reason for breakup altogether?
What do you suggest

@Aayat idk if this is cringy but an idea could be (if they have jobs) he could be using her so he could get this scholarship from his job that could put him in a higher rank.Maybe it requires something that the fmc has and the bf is slowly trying to pry it out of her so he can use that? Idk thats just what I thought of lol

That’s a good idea!!! Is this a Christian book? Just wondering

Rosalie wrote: "That’s a good idea!!! Is this a Christian book? Just wondering"

I’m not a believer, so no.
It’s just another romance

charlie mae wrote: "@Aayat idk if this is cringy but an idea could be (if they have jobs) he could be using her so he could get this scholarship from his job that could put him in a higher rank.Maybe it requires somet..."

Not a bad idea, could be possible. But that would mean the fmc is self sufficient
I initially planned for the fmc to be homeless after the breakup and the actual mmc provides her with shelter and all
If they have jobs, and she can get him to a higher rank, that means she won’t be homeless without him


I think I’ll switch to her catching him cheating, but as a reader would you read a book that involves cheating in the first two chapters? I genuinely want your opinion on this

as long as they don't get back together tbh. I hate it when they cheat, but it's also dramatic so it would keep readers eyes glued to a page, I think anyway. they'd get really mad and be like: this man better get what's coming for him. so then, well, they'll keep reading and hope that happens

@Aayat okay yeah that makes sense. Sooo I personally think it’s too early to add cheating in the first 2 chapters just Bcs as a reader they’ll want to get to know the characters and making the drama happen right away will feel forced. So maybe around 6-10 chapters add clues or details then eventually have the characters click with it. Thats my opinion 🤗

MTK wrote: "as long as they don't get back together tbh. I hate it when they cheat, but it's also dramatic so it would keep readers eyes glued to a page, I think anyway. they'd get really mad and be like: this..."

I’m not going to mention the ex the rest of the book (only his best friend ;p)

Aayat wrote: "MTK wrote: "as long as they don't get back together tbh. I hate it when they cheat, but it's also dramatic so it would keep readers eyes glued to a page, I think anyway. they'd get really mad and b..."

Should I?

charlie mae wrote: "@Aayat okay yeah that makes sense. Sooo I personally think it’s too early to add cheating in the first 2 chapters just Bcs as a reader they’ll want to get to know the characters and making the dram..."

Okay yes
Works
And should I keep it in first person? I don’t think people read third person narration anymore

Aayat wrote: "charlie mae wrote: "@Aayat okay yeah that makes sense. Sooo I personally think it’s too early to add cheating in the first 2 chapters just Bcs as a reader they’ll want to get to know the characters..."

Or single pov?

@Aayat well I personally love writing alternative pov. But definitely do first pov of the main character. (I hte 3rd pov 😭)

@Aayat, Ok, I was just wondering.

:)

Rosalie wrote: "@Aayat, Ok, I was just wondering."

Also I wasn’t even born into a Christian family
My mom and her mom are HEAVILY into prayers, but we aren’t Christians

Should I set the book in a country I have never been in? Or keep it local, and the same city I have lived in all 18 years of my life

@aayat oooh thats a really good question! I honestly think it depends on however you picture certain scenes (idk like a random walk on a beach in Hawaii) but for your book, I’d do local. But whichever works!

charlie mae wrote: "@aayat oooh thats a really good question! I honestly think it depends on however you picture certain scenes (idk like a random walk on a beach in Hawaii) but for your book, I’d do local. But whiche..."

It’s my debut novel, and I don’t wanna mess things up, I think I’m going to keep it local then.
And if I use any cultural context, or a common phrase in my native language, should I add a translation in a box at the end of a paragraph?

@Aayat Unless a character is going to explain it then totally! But if it just feels like an author is putting that in there just for readers to understand will feel a bit off. usually you’d put the translation in the acknowledgements or if you wanted to write a few pages at the end of the book of what your favorite scenes are etc you could put the definition at the end of the page. But I think having the character define in (either saying it out loud to someone or mentioning it in their pov) works really well just make sure it’s smooth and clear.

@Aayat, Thats ok, I will still probably read it when it comes out. I was just wondering because I had an idea about God in it but I wanted to make sure it was Christain just in case.