Poets + Writers discussion

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Hey! Thanks Sai!

I thank in advance all the feedback anyone could give to me. I am not a native speaker, I do poetry in spanish but I want to do original works in english. Don't hold back, I rather impartial and honest feedback

Sonnet 1:

A story starts in dark and guilt,
where blends the notch of pain and pleasure.
This red-wine dawn with ink will gift
obsession's worth of neat endeavor.

The pond is home of mist and calls,
will spawn the joy or evil eye?
The dragon hauls within the waltz
and frames the rust on bonding ties.

A moth shall tease the stains in mask,
disgrace in dwelling shells of flesh;
The darner, charmed of gilded rag,
ignored the danger, croaking bless.

But even ruins allure merchants,
and cypress blooms in lair of serpents.