Kaylas Writing Process discussion

This is a topic about my novel LOVESTRUCK

OOOH ALL CAPITALSSS

Heres what i have rn:

I was driving my pink convertible to school. As I drove down the highway, a blue truck swerved right in front of me. I lay on the horn.
My dad had told me to drop off my dog, Cookie, the Golden retriever, at the vet before driving to school. So, Cookie was in the back.
I strained to see the driver in the front seat. It was Tanner. My archenemy. His brown hair was flying in the wind. His best friend, Josh was sitting in the passenger seat. His girlfriend, Maria was in the back.
Now, he could one up me on some things, but one thing he couldn't one up me on was my boyfriend. Maria, his girlfriend was the most popular of the nerds. Gross. Meanwhile, my boyfriend, Grayson, was the most popular of the popular. Well, besides Tanner.
I pulled up to school after dropping off Cookie. Grayson walked up to my car.
"Hey, Blair!" He yelled.
"Hey, Grayson!" I yelled back.
"Can we talk privately?"
"Sure." I opened the car door and he followed suit.
"Listen, I don't want you to think I'm cheating on you or anything, I just have a science project with Maria."
"That's fine. Catch you later."
I walked out of the car with purpose.
Later that day, at lunch, I saw Grayson and Maria holding hands and she had her head on his shoulder.
I felt my eyes fill with tears. I pulled out my phone.
"Mom?"
"Yes, dear?"
"Do I have permission to leave school early?"
"Of course."
"Thank you, mother."
"Wait, why do you need to leave?"
"Grayson is cheating on me."
"Yes, just pick up Cookie on your way home."
I hung up on my mom.
As I was walking out of the building, I realized that this was Maria which meant that Tanner would need to know about this.
Yes, I had his phone number, in 6th grade, he gave it to me because we were working on a project together.
I pulled out my phone and wrote, Maria is cheating on you with Grayson.
I pressed send.
Almost immediately a text popped up on my phone. Please! Do you really think I'm going to trust you?
Anger surged in my chest. Fine! See for yourself. They're at table 4.
I will, he responded.
I started to drive to the vet. But just as I picked up Cookie, another text came through.
Please, they aren't there.
I sighed, Fine. Don't trust me, but it will only prove that I was right over time.
Sure.
I drove away. Right when I got home, my mother wrapped me up in a giant hug.
"I'm so sorry."
I ran up to my room and called Grayson.
"Hey, Blair!"
"Hey, Grayson!"
"What's up?"
"I know your secret."
"What secret?"
"I can't even say it I'm so disgusted."
"But, B!"
"Never call me that again."
"But,"
"I didn't call you to give you a shot at redemption, I called you to tell you that our relationship is over, you lied to me and I cannot live with that. Goodbye."
And with that I hung up.
Then my phone dinged. You were right.
Who was this from? Oh, it was Tanner.
I don't need you to tell me that. I know it already
Flirting already, I see?
No. I don't even like you.
They all say that.
I slammed my phone down on my pink desk.

Ooooh! I really like it. But maybe drag it all out longer? Really get into Blairs emotions and all. And if my mom found i my bf was cheating on me, she'd flip

Sorry 😞 im not trying to come across as rude 😔

Ok! Ill edit it!

Clare wrote: "Sorry 😞 im not trying to come across as rude 😔"

Ur not rude! Its feedback and i would expect nothing less!

There’s a lot of “yes.”
“I understand.”
“Ok.”
Type stuff and maybe you should like idk

“Yes.” She nodded.
“I understand.” She said, glancing down.
“Ok.” She murmured.

Clare wrote: "Ooooh! I really like it. But maybe drag it all out longer? Really get into Blairs emotions and all. And if my mom found i my bf was cheating on me, she'd flip"
Also, one thing, blairs mom is rich and kind of annoying

Yesss I agree
But i still think ur book ideas are absolutely awesome, Kayla

Tyyyyy

They are :]

Evangeline✨✨✨ wrote: "They are :]"

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Uh could u make me a group called Evangeline’s writing process? I can’t make groups so….

Evangeline✨✨✨ wrote: "Uh could u make me a group called Evangeline’s writing process? I can’t make groups so…."

Sure! Are we friends?

Tyx could u make me moderator by chance?

Me too?