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The description pulled me in, before I actually started. ;)
wow *holds her palms to her cheeks* that's an INCREDIBLE descripton. I'm booked. lol
Glad to know you guys like the description. Hopefully you like the actually story just as much.
yepp. i read it... it's asolute awsomeness :)
yupp, i guess dat's not a proper word. lol
haha. it is now! i officially declare it a word!
amaranta, what you've written here is absolutely amazing. it really pulled me in. one thing i do want to say is that it might be a good idea if you lengthen the amount of time that Taylor started attending her new school before she realizes how powerful she actually is. It just kind of feels like everything happened to come a little to easiily to her. So basically what I'm saing is that you could add more conflicting situations for her to deal with, that way the fact that she's a teen and new to this life it reads a little more realistically. otherwise, this story's jut awesome girl. honestly, i've never read anything about faeries and pixies, im a vampire/werefolf kinda gal, but this got me. it really did. hope your posting more soon =)
Thanks T-Rose, I'll work on that. This is for my NaNo, Exchange. Since I can't post a link, because I'm not allowed to start writing yet, this'll only be the synopsis. Let me know what you guys think.
Jemmy Larson is not your typical teenager in the year 2198. She has been given anything she could ever want. Her parents have spoiled her since the day she was born. She's never had to work for anything in her life. Anyone who meets her can easily say that her life is beyond perfect.
But Jemmy is far from content. And, when the impossible happens, she must find out what is really going on in her life. Soon, she uncovers a secret that could destroy worlds. Now, she has to make a choice that could kill her and everyone she loves.
the title Exchange certainly sounds strong, mysterious and capable of catching the eye. just make the story live up to it. question: is Jemmy really typical just because her life is perfect? and its 2198 so you've gotta be careful when you use the term typical at that point in time. true? otherwise i like the idea you have. sounds like she's gotta learn a lesson about not taking things for granted. that's a golden concept
LOL, loads of people are plotting their stories in the future for the NaNo...this synopsis sounds reeallly, as Rose put it, mysterious. I hoe it turns out great and can't wait to read it
Hmmm...good point. I didn't think about that. Let me edit it. How does that sound now?
Yay! I finally finished the prologue of Exchange! http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...Read it, hopefully, like it, post feedback, please.
aawesome! I liked the way u ended ur prologue.there r a few spelling/grammar mistakes, but all in all, pretty myseterious n intriguing
I love it! I do! It's totally awesome. And I saw a few spelling mistakes too, but that's what spell check is for.
yup! plus it's nano, so no worries! quantity, not quality! tho u hv both :P
Amaranta wrote: "Yay! I finally finished the prologue of Exchange! http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...Read it, hopefully, like it, post feedback, please."
so i just read your prologue to Exchange and i thought it was pretty good, only i have to agree with amina that you ended it in an awesome way. i love how you crafted jemmy's flow from being seemingly modest about her financial situation to being a "i don't give a f@ck what you all say" kind of gal. great way to pull in the reader for the ride at hand, so to speak. nice job. uh....also, you've got some grammatical errors in there, like using except when it should be accept. and the last paragraph needs some serious conventional tweeking a lot of words are spelled incorrectly. im guessing that you were just typing fast. anyway good job amaranta
Thanks, and yeah, I was typing really fast. I fixed the errors though...I think all of them.
YAY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! For those of you wondering, I just finished Chapter 1 of Exchange!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Not really sure I like how I ended the chaper, so that could change...probably will change it later. But for now, please enjoy. http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...
http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2... A story I'm co-writing with Kelsie. Read it. Love it. Please.
I reviewed it! Please tell me that there will be more soon :D
Well, we need to write it. We're both working on chapters now...we just need to finish.
ATTENTION: FOR THOSE OF YOU READING (and if you aren't you need to be)The Secret Diary Of Emily Carlton, KELSIE JUST WROTE A NEW CHAPTER, AND IT IS THE BEST CHAPTER EVER! SO GO READ. http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...
YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES!!!!!!!!!!!!! I FINALLY FINISHED CHAPTER 10 OF Daydreamer!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...
Just finished chapter 8 of The Secret Diary Of Emily Carlton. It's probably the best chapter yet(don't take me seriously, I'm being biased because I wrote it. Though it really is pretty good.) http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...
I started a new story tonight. Hope you like it.
Lilth isn't like everyone else around her. She can control shadows. She has always has this ability and has no idea why she got it. No one besides her family knows about her strange gift...
That is, until He shows up.
The Shadow Keeper
And yes, I'm aware the description is really bad, but it's all I could think of at the moment. I promise that the story is better than the description.
Oh goodness that's a gorgeous cover!! I will go and read it now :D
Chapters 13 & 14 of The Secret Diary Of Emily Carlton: http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...Chapter 3 of The Shadow Keeper:http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...
Enjoy
Link to my novel
Fantasy and YA
Daydreamer
Description: Taylor Evernight is a normal fifteen year old girl, except for the fact she cannot stop daydreaming. She spends her free time in her imagination, creating worlds and wielding incredible powers. That is as close she can come to anything unusual...
Until one day she is thrown into a world she had no idea existed. Now she is struggling to learn what is a daydream and what is reality.
Preface:
Most people want something special to happen to them. They think that their lives would be so much better with a little excitement in them. You might even be one of them. I'm telling you right now that you are dead wrong adnd I would know. I always wished for the same thing. Excitement, and an intersting life, I would of given anything for it. Now I'd give anything to have a normal life. I just want things to go back to normal. But more than anything I wish that it never happened in the first place. I wish that I was just a normal girl. That I was ignorant enough to believe that this only happened in book. But that is impossible. No matter how much I wish, beg and plead, I can't change anything. You probably don't know what I'm talking about so maybe I should go back a bit...
For more please follow this link: http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...