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Okay this really intrigued me, but I think you missed a place, when it said, "scent of fresh warn blood," i think you meant "warm."
Chapter 1 ReviewRun to live- the pack's standard. That's what we were doing now.- "we were" i believe is kind of contradicting "now" since "now" is present tense and "we were" i think is past.
School has overtaken my brain.- I'm just a bit confused about this sentence. It just doesn't make sense to me.
I ran silently to me prey.- Show. Don't tell. "I ran silently" doesn't show me anything. What does it look like when Charlie runs? How is she able to move 'silently'. Although I use them all the time, adverbs aren't the best words to use when you want to show your readers what is going on. Using more charged verbs usually does the trick.
By any chance have you written any more? Ever since twilight came out I've not been the biggest fan of all this vamp and werewolf stuff but this is actually REALLY good :D I hope you keep writing this.
Whoa, my email Notifiers aren't working. >:[ I've actually edited it, so it might make a little more sense now... *shrugs* Or not.
And thanks you guys. :D Means a lot that you want to keep reading it!
Yep, it's back. Sorry guys!