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Hey, guys! I really need help with my story! I have absolutely no idea what's going to happen next.

Basically, Emma is going out with someone, let's say Bob, but Joe likes Emma. The thing is, Emma despises "Joe" with a passion! It's a passion, but not the kind "Joe" is looking for. Emma doesn't know that "Joe" is in love with her; she's just in her fantasy with "Bob". However, "Joe"'s slightly older brother, "Billy" steps into the picture and for now is kind of just there. Oh! And there is also Aleah who is Emma's best friend and Kade, her gay guy buddy.

What can I do with "Billy" and everyone else? I really want someone to die. I have absolutely no idea why, but I want someone to die. Just not Aleah, not Kade, and not Emma. "Joe", "Billy", and "Bob" are all up for grabs.

Thanks! And pretty please read my story. I need feedback!

I'm confused LOL (who's on first whats on second?) I know you cant give too much away but its hard to give adive without knowing a bit more of whats going on. & is there a sub plot?

Well, Emma and this guy do not get along at all! I really don't want it to be all cliche and have the two end up being together. So Emma ends up being with someone else (who is not to be named). I just need some kind of action going on; some kind of drama or something.

any particular type of drama? Jealousy? A fight between friends? or bigger

whatever you think would work best. A fight between friends doesn't seem quite big enough, though. I don't know.

What if someone was to run away? Or maybe there is a party and at the party two of the guys get into a fight that gets out of hand and one ends up with a broken nose or something? Or One of the friends starts hanging with the wrong crowd and getting involved in some pretty shady stuff?....any of this work?

Yes! That's all really good, but one of them sticks out to me! I'm not going to say which one, but thank you sooooo much!!!

no prob glad i could help

I think that if you want someone to die, have it be Joe. I haven't read your book, but he seems like a good one to have a sad-ish ending to his character. Maybe Bob could do it in jealousy for Joe hanging out after Emma. These are just my ideas, hope they can help you in your dilemma.

Oh!!! Good idea! Oh, wow. Lovin' it. Maybe, maybe not.

I also was thinking that perhaps he could commit suicide or something along those lines. I'm glad to help! I LOVE writing, and good storyplots & characters, so to me, this kind of stuff is fun. Hope this one idea will spark something, if you know what I mean. :)

I'm verrrrrrrrrrrrry sensitive about suicide; One of my best friends committed suicide, so it's not something that I like to write about and I usually don't talk about. But it would be a great idea for someone else, just not me.

Yeah, it's not a pleasant topic.

No its not But its an important one.

Oh, sorry about that. Yeah, suicide isn't something I like to write about either, but thought I'd mention it anyway.

I agree with every single one of you. It's fine, Tabi. And Nate- yes, it is a very important topic that needs to be addressed, just not by me.

Kaylin ;) wrote: "I agree with every single one of you. It's fine, Tabi. And Nate- yes, it is a very important topic that needs to be addressed, just not by me."

I can respect that.

Did you ever get your idea or still looking?
lol

Yeah, I did. Thanks! I'm going with a fight ending in death...... Yeah... I just want someone dead. Like, really bad.

Luv ya, too. :) Idk why, but all of the good books end in death or permanent seperation. And it really strengthens a relationship for two of my other charries so... lol

Yeah. Like in all of the books by Nicholas Sparks, someone always dies. Always. Always, always.... always.

:D Thanks, chicka!

hahahahahaha! That;s awesome! I love that! It's pretty much my new saying. I steals it! :P

lol. kk.

*secretly steals it*

D':

Heehee! Luv ya, K-dizzle!!! You're awesome. We can share. >_<

Just not when it comes to brownies. Brownies are mine!!! I no share brownies.

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Oh yeah, I'll be caresul! But you don't get my amazing flying platypus! He all mine.

*Flying platypus just had babies. sends K-dizzle one*


Happy birthday!!!!!

((dude, my little sister just came up to me and said "your mother rides a vacuum cleaner))


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She's 9. and i have another sister that's 12, and a baby brother that turned 1 on wednesday

*GASP* You is a liar!

i has a spasm, too! Those is the best!


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Mmmm! it tastes just like raisins

Have a stroke of its' mane it turns into a plane and then it turns back again when you tug on its' winky.

Ew! That's dirty!

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IKRRRRRRR!! It's fudging amazing!

I love the 3rd one too. It's adorable!

:D Isn't it?

Totally!