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I'm having trouble finishing an idea and therefore, am going to test out a fairly new idea here. The pitch is beyond belief poorly written and it's also non-linear because that's how my brain works. ((One day, Christopher Nolan and I will be buddies.))

Memento Mori

Norms hardly defined society anymore or at least, not so since the day the world went away.

Zach was only seven when he learned he would never see the world. Several small towns banned together and isolated themselves from a virus that infected the world. While most dream of battling the rampant monsters that people turned into after infected; Zach realized, all he wanted was to be a superhero. Teaming up with another kid in town, Gabe Moriarty, the two strive through a mystery in search of a murderer. One who had to be infected by the virus giving Gabe the chance to be the monster hunter he always wanted to be; while Zach reached for his goal to finally become a superhero.

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...


My main project is a comic book that will NOT be posted here.

Oh. This is my comic book by the way. If anybody else has an Inkpop account then you'll understand how awesome this website is although, my comic book is dropping places today. Oh noes. :(

http://inkpop.com/projects/78598/our-...

Lou wrote: "I'm having trouble finishing an idea and therefore, am going to test out a fairly new idea here. The pitch is beyond belief poorly written and it's also non-linear because that's how my brain work..."

alright Miss Lou i read your story and i must say that i found it pretty interesting. i was confused at first because i thought Zach was supposed to be 7 years old and he and gabe seemed just a tad bit too mature, but then it seemed that time passed by. i guess what im saying is, the transition(if that's what it was) was sort of unclear. i would like to see the story develop a little more because i can't quite get a grip on the plot yet. i particularly like zach's wit. and i like that you're writing about a male, im so accustomed to reading about leading strong females these days, its actually a breath of fresh air to read zach's story. one last thing i would like to point is that it's kind of hard to understand the last section you wrote about zach being a 'hero'. is it all in his imagination to be one or is he really some kind of superhero? all in all, nice job

Aw well thank you for the comment. I never get to work with 7 year olds haha ((I'm a camp counselor/swim coach)) Guess I should try to work with them vs. the older kids. XD

I actually always have a male MC or narrator. ((Although, in my comic book there's a handful of strong female MCs.))

I rarely like having a female protagonist esp. as the narrator of a YA book. They tend to whine too much for my taste.

lol i understand the sentiment about the female characters. but please don't get me wrong. i appreciate their stories. i just like variety. in that sense, im glad i caught your story =)

I tend to prefer female antagonists. I mean. I completely understand what you're getting at. It'd be nice to have a decent female protagonist, I was always upset that I never had a role model in a book, it's my angst coming out there. XD I only had guys. But there's actually a lot of comic books with great female protagonists. If you're ever in a comics moods check out anything that deals with Kitty Pryde, Spider-Girl, Black Widow, Sue Storm (Fantastic Four) and Black Cat.

Once again, thanks for the little comment. XD It's been a horrid day so that makes me feel better.

sure thing. i'll check out those comic book personalities when i find the opportunity. i have so many books lined up already....and no prob about the comps. i tend to say what i mean

Comic books are so much more fun than books. XD But that might just be my opinion. I'd choose a graphic novel over a book any day. Unless it's Vonnegut, Burroughs, Clarke, Asimov or McCarthy.

XD Thanks.

XXD

I posted my comic book script.

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...

If anybody comments on this more than a simple "This is awesome" and so on, I promise to return the read. Just putting it out there because I love this project, it's amongst my favorites. Nor is it long. Only twenty-two pages. Not that you have to read all twenty-two haha

im on it. may take a while to read but im on it

T-Rose wrote: "im on it. may take a while to read but im on it"

Aw thanks. You're gonna have to start telling me what stories you'd rather me read over other ones. I haven't really looked at a lot of people's profiles yet. Only a few. XD

no prob. i'll let you know tomorrow tho. lol im tryna watch a basketball game and work on a book at the same time

Lou wrote: "XXD

I posted my comic book script.

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...

If anybody comments on this more than a simple "This is awesome" and so on, I promise to re..."


wow....just wow. i finished reading your comic script a moment ago and must say that i was generally enthralled. it was so exciting, yet...depressing. emotional. i couldn't tell at first who were the villains and who were the heroes but then when marionette showed up, everything started to make a great deal of sense. in any case, i find this very creative and even more descriptive that i thought it would end up being. you did a great job in setting the mood and setting especially since there are no...pictures to accompany the story. there were, however, several images implanted in my mind as i read this and i applaud you for the detail you put into this. though, i know that there was probably no other way that you could have presented this at this site. any way, i look forward to reading the rest of this whenever you post more of it. great job :D

as far as my work is concerned, i wish you would read all of it, but i would like to most suggest Moments Like This (read this one first) and Moments in Shackles. you can find them on my profile in my writing section. also, please be sure to read the descriptions before you begin reading them. thanks a lot

T-Rose wrote: "Lou wrote: "XXD

I posted my comic book script.

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...

If anybody comments on this more than a simple "This is awesome" and so on, I p..."

Oh wow. thanks so much for the review. That's the nicest that anybody has said to me. And I will try to check out your pieces tonight when I get the chance. I like to have a balance of reading in return and reading work for free. It's a habit from the site I used to write on. XD

Once again, thanks.

no problem. and thank you as well. a pencil for a pencil *winks*

T-Rose wrote: "no problem. and thank you as well. a pencil for a pencil *winks*"

XD You're welcome. But really, it's my pleasure. I love editing so much it's my goal to make it more or less a career of mine. haha

well im glad for that. a lot of people at this site don't don't have the time for it

T-Rose wrote: "well im glad for that. a lot of people at this site don't don't have the time for it"

From what I've discovered, it's not that they don't have the time. Either they don't really give a damn or don't know how. And there's always the excuse about how they don't want to hurt your feelings.

Anyhow, I'm off to reading your piece now. XD

i agree

Lou wrote: "A Short Story (Part Two),

Victory! This is the first story that I’ve read on here that used repetitive pronouns at the start of a sentence as best as they could. I really liked the two sentences..."

Well, Lou, I actually like the labels in T-rose's story. It gives the story a date, which really helps give you an idea of the time period. If there aren't any labels, this story could be the 50s for all I know. And maybe the labels were an intention?

Also, this could be the writing style? You mention T-Rose ending a sentence with "it" and starting another with "it" right after. That's not a big deal. I see you like Cormac McCarthy, and I see you've read The Road, a book filled with (technically) grammatical errors (fragments, apostrophe, etc.) So if you really are bothered so much by the fact that T-Rose did these things, you must have an issue with C.McCarthy's writing, or is this just bias because he's famous and writes Sci-Fi/Dystopia stories? I don't know.

Oh, I also am aware that you're a graphic novel fan and I was wondering what you thought of The Watchmen, since you didn't write a review.

Well first off, I like to say that I like that you called me out on all the things that I said. Just putting that out there, I feel like the contrast of opinions helps more than the same opinion or suggestion over and over again.

And I can understand labels in a period piece but not necessarily one now unless you want to trap it in that piece. Most of what I say comes from what I have learned from talking to literary agents/editors/publishers and so on. I also try to research and so on because I hope I can help out best in the world today.

And as much as I love Cormac McCarthy, I mean. That's his choice and more of a post-modernist/modernist view on lit. Sometimes some authors and just do that. And there's not many people looking to accept such submissions today. There's no bias, at all. Going back to what I said earlier. Not to mention, I feel like the word "it" in general weakens anybody's work.

As for Watchmen, I loved how monumental it was for the graphic novel world in the sense that it deconstructed everything that we know about heroes. And I enjoyed all the underlying themes/elements but wasn't a huge fan of the characters. Although, I did enjoy the plot.