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((thank you!))We raise out weapons again. "State you name." Emer says coldly. the man dismounts off his horse. "I must say." he says, smiling bitterly. "I surprised none of you remeber me. Ecspcially you Artemisia." He looks at the women next to me, dead in the eyes. "I have a message." Emer glares. "Erxes." she says and i study the mans reastion. He shruggs it off. "You;ve turned." Emer looks at the man, Erxes. "I like to think of it as a greowth in ability." He smies again. All of us in battle gear bavent moved. One of his soueles comes and tells him something. He nods and I glarea at him. I desire much to kill him and his souleles. A few months ago i never would have consired it."
TBC
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((XD dont have time to put what else i wrote yet but i will!))
"Erxes, you are banished. leave.""Emer is right, you are no longer apart of the Unate." Erxes shruggs. "They'll come around eventually." I scowl. The stuipid members of the maid, all they think is using our power against the mondrails, the humans. "But i haven't the time to get into that now, no, I have come with a message.... and a gift or two." He smiles in our silence.
"But not for you Emer, or you, Artemisia. No." He looks at everyone. No one but for you Siarai." He looks at me. I'm glaring at him, but the next words wipe any look off my face. "From Alcabar." Whispers run threw our crowd.
That's what i thought." He smiled again. "He says you wouldn't belive me when i told you, so he wrote it. In latin of course." he reaches into his black robe and pulling out a scroll and rolls it toward my feet. I look at Emer, but i pick it up anyway.
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I'll show you what i mean with the paragraph thing.))
What you wrote in post 7:
"Erxes, you are banished. Leave!" [Says Emer.]
"Emer is right, you are no longer apart of the Unate!" [Yells *whoever*]
Erxes shruggs. "They'll come around eventually."
I scowl. The stupid members of the Maid. All they think is using our power against the mondrais, the humans.
"But I haven't the time to get into that now! No. I have come with a message... and a gift, too."
He smiles [while in] silence.
"But nor for you Emer, or you, Artemisia. No." [He said while] while looking at everyone. "No one but for you Sairai."
He looks at me. I'm glaring at him but the next words wipe any look off my face.
"From Alcabar." [I say.]
Whispers run threw our crowd.
okay... i will try harder to do that! And in the last paragraph Erxes says that. English be prepared to see me!
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XDMy love,
Don't worry for me. For the time being please watch over these for me. They will cause no trouble, i hope. Sorry i can not write more. Love you always.
-Alcabar
I stare at perfect latin handwritting. It was Alcabar. I haven't heard from Alcabar in two years. The rumor was he turned, but i never believed it. He wouldn't do that.
"This says almost nothing, Erxe." I say rolling it up, and sticking it in my belt.
"Maybe this will." He says, sidestepping and there are two children, bound and a bite bloody, Next to him. Artemisia gasps.
"What is this brother?" she demands. Artemisia always loved children. "Is it not obvious? Alcabar's gift to Siarai." I grip my weapon, my Calmar.
"Alcabar would never do this." I growl.
"He's not the way he used to be." Erxes pauses. "Acually, he never was." I glare at him.
"I must go. Bye sister." He gives Artemisia a mock wave. "And enemies." with a short mutter of words, he and all his souleles are gone. The two children stand theire as the softer of us huddle around them.
Eventuall i walk over to the. One girl and one boy. Maybe 13 or 14. They've already taken off their bindings.
"Let's go inside." Emer said. And we did, Artemisia putting her cloak over the girls' shoulders, who looked very confused.
"What are your names?" Someone asks. "I'm-I'm .
((ugh. tbc))
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he he wait till i write the next part, im writing it all in a notebook now, and i'm just transfering it, useing a translation dictionary sometimes.
It's the most bitter betrayl that hurts the most. The one that you least suspect when you should. Then comes the love betrayl. When you walk into your heart and find everything you belived in was a lie. But a bitter bertayl never loses to any of them. When everything you worked for is gone. When the person stading next to you. The person you've loved for years walks away.
That;s when you see the person you really know. The person that will accually stand beside you. The one you really love. The perosn so pastionate about you, you dont see it. Someone who iwll always love you. more then anyuthing. Forever.
"Never loes hope." that's what he told me. "Ever." He smiled and kissed my cheel. I peered into his deep blue eyes. "I won't" I whisper. He strapped on Silvery, then paused. The black made him look dark, dangerous. he pulled out his Calmae. I looked at the beautiful weapon. "I'll be back." He took my hand and drew a simple leter in my skin. It vanashed instantly. "My love." He whisperered, his mouth close to my ear, his hands in my hair. "you'll be my only love."
I knew the letters but they sounded more true when he said them. He turned to go and i grabbed his hand, I saw a glint of surprise in his eyes as i kissed him. he smiled. The last true smile. Then he left. and i stood in the doorway. all in balck, just like him. My heart knew he would be back. I turned to go. But then i turned back and watched him ride off. his soft slightly curly dark brown hair being the last things i see of him. Alcabar.
Raids arn't normal. As a dark one, i know. It was a surprise to all of us when they turned out not to be raiding. I lower my long Calmar and look at Emer. Her strong gaze is on the leader, a man dressed all in black, like us. A former dark one.
i still have more to write, just not the time now!