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I've written a beginning and you can find it under the tag Romance, page 75 it's called the VA.
I need a second(or hundred the more the merrier)perspective. I have some questions you can answer:
- Does it come out that Olivia and miss Cadbury is the same person?
- Who do you guess the story will be about? (2 ppl)
- What personality does Olivia have (intelligent+arrogant, shallow+intelligent or very friendly, helpful and clever)
Thanks for all the help :D

I would love to read your story, but I can't get into your profile. Could you tell me the title of your story or what it's under,something to help me out?

Oh sorry I missed that :D but you can find it under the tag Romance, page 75 and it's called The VA :D

Kay, Thanks.

I don't know if I'm just stupid and blind, but I still can't find it. Super sorry. I'll keep looking.

It's cool I'll add you so you can find it on my profile

Nooo it's all my fault sorry i wrote page 79 when it's obviously 75 crazy sorry

I thought it was a very interesting plot line but I thought that the sentences could flow a little better, have more interesting words and less "ands"....VERY interesting plot, just make it prettier.
Yes, it's pretty obvious that Olivia and Miss Cadbury are the same person.
Aiden and Olivia most likely will be the main characters. I like how observant she is, although I do question Aiden's character. He's hiding something, he's different. I like it ;D.
Olivia seems intelligent, or at least wants to be. I think if she looked better she would be very friendly. Yes, she seems honest and clever, but I think Aiden is just as or more clever. I think Olivia is kind above all else, but I think that she's got a devious and resilient side of her that sometimes overcomes her kindness.

Would you mind reading my story? It's only the first chapter, and I could really use some comments. If you want you can also check out my other writing, but it's the story I really want you to read. It's called Birthright, and you can find it on my profile or the link is right here-
http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...

cool beans.