Struggling Writers discussion

Hi everyone! My name's TOLI and I would love comments/feedback/likes of my writing!!

Here's a link to all of my writing:
http://www.goodreads.com/story/list/3...

Here's a link to the story that I would like feedback on the most Vapors:
http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...


~TOLI

Thanks!

I have chapter two of 'VAPORS' up and I would really appreciate feedback/comments/likes!! I want honest comments! I would really love for as many people to read it as possible please :D hehe.

Well here is the link:

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2509...

Check it out PLEASE!!

Vapors

click, suspense

Just wondering if camera man and suit man are in the same wharehouse

ohh no it gets explained more in the next chapter, suit man isn't exactly on...earth...sort of

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...

edited second chapter may clear up the whole thing abut the suit man, I made it more obvious that he isn't in a 'normal' space

OMGOMGOMGOMGOMG Third chapter to VAPORS??!?!
READ PLEASE!! (constructive criticism/comments/ likes!!)
They are sooo appreciated!

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...

A collection of memories for my english class! Read please?!!