Writing Passionates discussion

Alright Kitties...

Here's my most popular story! (so far its been liked about 150 times) :D I love hearing your comments and feedback!!! Thanks :)

Description: Meet Amber Thomson and Dessie Anders, two girls from two very different walks of life. When mysterious events (like strange, all-too-realalistic dreams and prophetic messages from a shadowy voice) begin to unfold, these girls realize that life is not all that it seems, and for one of them, it may be cut short.

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...

Note: So far my story has 17 chapters (trust me, they go by fast), and I am always updating, so be sure to check my thread often for new chapters :)

I'm trying to get as much feedback as possible. After all, I'd like to publish this one day :)

I just posted a new chapter of Happily Ever Afterlife! Enjoy!

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...

Ive updated some more, please come check it out! :)

Updated more....:D