Writers Unite discussion

Type: Story
Genre: Soft Science Fiction

At this present moment I'll be posting up stories I've been writing for years upon years here. Three stories (which haven't been uploaded) are not finished and will take me god knows how long to get through them.

1) Mystical Sun: The Forgotten World (posted in review needed fragments. Never chapter by chapter) link: http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...

2) Mystical Sun: Dreams of a Dying World (needs to be edited.)

3) Mystical Sun: Leaving (Needs to be edited, but you may review if you wish) link: http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...

Ooookay, I'll get to this as soon as possible. I have like so much saved that I need to read... so please bare with me, it may take a few days or I might be done by today =D Can't wait to see what you have for me.

Oh you know what? Take as much time as you like--I have no intention on going anywhere :)

That and I have tons of editing to wave through, so no worries. I'm just glad I found a group of people who are willing /to/ read what I wrote. The few I've asked still haven't gotten back to me... it's been nearly a year :(

awwww, no, no way! I never make anyone wait that long. A week at the most, but now I've moved your writing to the very top of my folder, so yours will be the first I read :D

Why I'm flattered! I'll slip you the same gratitude by going through what you have to offer.

Mystical World: The forgotten sun

Ok, I have to say that the way you write is superb... so good that I really have to concentrate to understand the amazing words you use and the realistic descriptions you depict. I'm really liking this.

As I read, I'll point out any mistakes I find, hope this helps.

Cal’yl squirmed at sound, just a minor bump of fear, nothing her mother would put down such a fine soldier for.
-at the sound

There was no timed wasted on either of them
-no time

The creature loosened his grip once against at the command at the Truthsayers word, she then spoke again.
-Do you mean again instead of against

He was killed cause of my mother… she told herself, he was killed due to over powering influence.
-bnecause, or add an apostrophe before 'cause' so that it makes sense.


How old are you? I'm curious. This is absuletely fantastic. I love your descriptions; they're so vivid. The ending really left me handing, inform me when you have more of this up because I really want to know what happens. I'm totally intrigued.


It'd be cool if you checked out my writings; I'd suggest The Rebel, my NaNo story of this year. Also, I'd appreicate if you take out a few minues to write and submit a limerick to the ccompetition section in this group.

Thanks and can't wait for more. x

That's the unfortunate thing actually, after this flashback, it flips over to another character :/. And I've yet to edit her part :(. Still working on clearing up the prologue and the first thirteen chapters to precede this one.

First thriteen? :O Wow, that is gonna be long, but I will read it =D

I finally did some revising after homework, here's another piece from the Forgotten World.

Type: Story
Genre: Soft-science-fiction

Title: Mystical Sun: Heresy Beyond the Right (cheesy yes, but it's a small short story within a chapter piece)
http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...