GR Writers discussion

For...well, poetry! (Wow, I'm so great at explanations...)

well then ill explain

this section is for poetry and the poetry lovers, place it in here and you can all read and comment about it, you can then do a group session so one person thinks of a line then the next helps out and gives the next

that better halsey

Ok, this poem I wrote a little while ago, and it's about depression.

Here's the link: http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...

I like to use a lot of metaphorical language so if there's ever anything in any of my poems that you don't understand please ask, I love questions! And I'm totally up for constructive criticism!

im sure i have read this before!! and im sure i liked it!! my memory is so rubbish!!

This is another poem of mine, it's pretty short so I'd love if you'd give it a quick read and maybe offer some constructive criticism!

Here's the link: http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...

Ivon wrote: "well then ill explain

this section is for poetry and the poetry lovers, place it in here and you can all read and comment about it, you can then do a group session so one person thinks of a line t..."

Haha thanks, yeah.

Tara-jayne wrote: "im sure i have read this before!! and im sure i liked it!! my memory is so rubbish!!"

Oh trust me mine is the same way!

well where to begin, i know, first off the techniques and the rhyming go along perfectly making it so easy to get your point of view across and creating a deppressing effect as you were aiming for that feeling, that is then good as poetry then also uses a lot of different feelings, though the one thing i say you would need to work on is not the lengh but the emotion then, i do get the feeling of depression but when doing this you really need to make people sad

lol!! wow!! i lie meetin people with bad memorys!! i dont feel left out!!

And this is the last poem I'll post today, I promise! (Sorry to completely dominate the topic, it won't happen again! ...Ok so maybe it will but...you know. Bear with me here.)

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...

And this poem is by far my personal favorite. It was inspired by the Paramore song Brick By Boring Brick.

Ivon wrote: "well where to begin, i know, first off the techniques and the rhyming go along perfectly making it so easy to get your point of view across and creating a deppressing effect as you were aiming for ..."

Alright thanks! I wrote this one a bit quickly than I should have so I didn't give it as much thought as I should have so I really appreciate the advice!

i had already read all three from the first hyperlink so the review came from that one, and dont worry about it, i want as many stories/poems as you can get on here, it helps and i can give some very good feedback sometimes

yes you can!! hence the story i am working on!!!
(ivon) i know 3 ways which to improve, but ill only tell you 2!!
omg"" i cnt beleive you did that! lol

you need to learn, poetry is a different topic all together, in a story you need to learn techniques on your own, you can get help and tips, but that does not truly help you become an auther

thanks Ivon!! lol, what theme should i do after the one i am doing!

right, i decided to do a bit of poetry, its pretty rubbish but i did it in ten minutes :P

all the poetry that im doing (probably wont be many)
http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...

its called broken wings by the way

lol, ill look

hey guys..myself chhaya....i'm posting a poem hope u all like it..


LIFE

Life is to live,
learn to forgive.
Life is full of ups and downs,
sometime happiness,sometimes frown.
Life is a struggle,
but not a muggle.
With so many events taking place,
with some dullness and some grace.
Life's statistics cannot be told,
no'one has the power to hold.
Sometimes scoldings,sometimes praise,
it's a life's single stage.
Sometimes unwanted things,
this is what the next stage brings.
Sometimes life's glorious,
sometimes mysterious.
Some incidents bring change,
devlopment of nature very strange.
Life bring challenges,
pretense of mere inches.
Sarcastic things happening,
it is a onset of new beginning.
For everyone life has different meaning,
for me its the melody to sing.

this is my another poem


U FOR ME
Oh!My dearest possesion.
I love you so much,
I can feel you in every touch.
You are always mine,
For me you are my sunshine.
You are in my dream in night,
and in morning in every sight.
You are so special for me,
that in every sight i want you to see.
If you are with me i am always strong,
without you i feel i am wrong.
I am always there for you,
towards you i'll be true.
for me you are like glowing sun,
I'm sorry if anything wrong i've done.
for you i can climb a hill,
or forever stand still.
at last I love you the most,
hope our love ever grows.


by-chhaya

well, where should i start, hmm, alright, it really does rhyme with the pattern of AABB and really does consist of slice of life standards, so it really is quite real, just keep it up, what i would say not to improve, but try different styles of rhymes, like half rhymes

Ivon wrote: "well, where should i start, hmm, alright, it really does rhyme with the pattern of AABB and really does consist of slice of life standards, so it really is quite real, just keep it up, what i would..."

thnks and ya sure

[spooky_light]! wrote: "Ivon wrote: "well, where should i start, hmm, alright, it really does rhyme with the pattern of AABB and really does consist of slice of life standards, so it really is quite real, just keep it up,..."

yeah, it usually keeps things different, but you could have something that has one half with a AABB rythym and then a CDCD kind of rythym, all im saying is to try and mix things up a little bit

All my poems are in here: http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...

I don't have that many and I'm no pro, I just started writing poetry :)

yeah! i randomly started!! lol

I started cause there was a contest here on goodreads and I said, "why not give it a try" and i just loved it

hehe!!
Ill post my poems in a sec

the forest
http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...

feeling down
http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...

love you
http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...

mine
http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...