Creative Writing discussion

ANGEL
Dressed in white
Soft and light
With those wings
And glittering rings
A magic stick in hand
She is not on land
A happy face
A girl with grace
She is an angel
Just an angel!

Like it, but I felt "Stick in hand, She is not on land" Didn't flow very well.

Thanks...I'll work on what you said..

:) You don't have to listen to me. Just a tip.

ummm... what about if u said 'She's'

Kat (Baby Tarzan) wrote: ":) You don't have to listen to me. Just a tip."

Thanks!!Atleast someone told me something!

(S) Asami Seo Hyun 축구 wrote: "ummm... what about if u said 'She's'"

Yeah,thats a good idea maybe...Thanks! :D

yep :)