The Personal Journal discussion

(I'm not a poet, but I have a lot of unresolved feelings that I wonder if I could get out through here. Here goes nothing.)

I'm not mad.
You said you were sorry,
I believe that.
But
That doesn't stop it from hurting--
And the questions--
And the sadness--
And
The
Confusion.
What do I say?
We barely knew each other.
But we had
So
Much
Potential.
But we had
So
Many
Plans.
I guess I'm more disappointed.
Embarrassed.
It's confusing, and
It
Hurts
Inside.
I'm not mad.
But my heart hurts.

...Because I have far too much experience as an IB student, I will now analyze my own poem.
The confusing syntax is meant to support the confusion the speaker professes to feel. (She's so confused, she can't even write/speak English!)

The repetition of the three-word-phrases mimics the repetition of the thoughts in the speaker's head. They're playing on a loop, slightly altered each time but with the same idea.

Short phrases indicate frustration and that the speaker either doesn't want to talk or cannot talk.

Beyond that....I'm the author, and the speaker, and I don't even know. I guess that doesn't make this a very good piece of literature, huh? Unless just the syntax conveys everything pretty simply.


....carry on.

... I love you buddy. :)

((i know Ra personally. just so everyone knows... :) ))