Writer's of EHT discussion

In this thread we would like to start sharing any form of writing that you have written and start giving each other feedback on their writings.

Dancing with Death


Swiftly we move
Graceful as Swans
My life in her hands
Her grip in mine

She takes the lead
And I Abide
Accepting my fate
It is my time


This is a poem a wrote for a witing assignment about death.

Would you like critique or feedback?

Farrah wrote: "Would you like critique or feedback?"

I'm looking for both and then I was going to state my perspective when I wrote the poem and what I was trying to accomplish with it.