Struggling Writers discussion

Ive posted the Prologue to my novel, "The Fall of Man."

I'd love some feedback from you guys. Thanks in advance.

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...

~Timm

I've added Chapter One of my novel, "The Fall of Man." I'd love some more feedback/criticism of both it and the prologue. Thanks!

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...

~Timm

I've posted Chapter Two. Feedback coveted.

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...

~Timm