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She screamed a scream so loud the earth shook and opened up beneath her, summoning her, swallowing her whole being. Awestruck by what just happened all her best friend Nathan could do was stand there, and join in on her screaming with his own.

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A burning sensation singed the hairs on their arms as a feeling of unease crawled over them. Nathan jumped and pulled Lisa with him to their feet. But when they looked around all was still pitch black.

(So? Emphasis. Hahahaha. And I didn't know what else to put. O.o)

(Better? Haha)

A light burst from absolutely nowhere momentarily blinding them making them shut their eyes tight. And after a few minutes of too-much-light it began to dim and when they opened their eyes the were face to face with a 7 foot tall beast leaning close to them with slobber dripping from it's rotted teeth.

Just as it raised it's head high above theirs, preparing to eat them--or so it looked like--a huge man with a sword and wings as black a night came and began to fight the beast.

At the last second they tried to turn back and go to the other turn off but when they turned around the Zombies were already behind them as well, like they fell from the ceiling. The Zombies were blocking their only exit.

The winged man flew above the zombies and began to massacre their slow and sluggish bodies. When the man was finished he looked at Nathan and Lisa. His face was covered in zombie blood. "I told you not to go there."

"Maybe we should have listened" Lisa replies, shaking. Still she is hanging on the Nathan and trying not to cry, she doesn't want to look weak in front of him.
"Maybe he should have said it sooner." Nathan snaps.

(Anything at all my friend hahahaha)

"Maybe you should have listened more and you wouldn't be here now. You'd already be gone." The winged man held up his hand as Nathan tried to talk, cutting off Nathan's words. "I'm Tim. We need to leave before more of them come. Those were the weakest of the 'pack'" He air quotes pack and leads a shaking Lisa and a pissed-off-looking Nathan to the other turn off.