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message 1: by Ingrid (new)

Ingrid Hi, i didn't know where to post this but my name is Ingrid and i was wondering if anyone could take a look at my poetry! like on the link or comment on the link for feedback and critique, please!


http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/3...


message 3: by Ingrid (new)

Ingrid thanks!


message 4: by Billie Jo (new)

Billie Jo (jojolov333) I do too! Haha. You write lovely. Haha


message 5: by Ingrid (new)

Ingrid thx! i really appreciate your kind words;)


message 6: by Billie Jo (new)

Billie Jo (jojolov333) You are very welcome. I always try to be a kind person when I can :))))


message 7: by JazzyCat (new)

JazzyCat (dayandnightgirl) | 13 comments Here's mine. :) Some are pretty old, from back when I was really depressed.


http://www.goodreads.com/story/list/7...


message 8: by Billie Jo (new)

Billie Jo (jojolov333) Ti Amo ♥just love♥ wrote: "Here's mine. :) Some are pretty old, from back when I was really depressed.


http://www.goodreads.com/story/list/7..."


I like your poetry! You're good. :)


message 9: by Billie Jo (last edited Jul 03, 2012 10:04AM) (new)

Billie Jo (jojolov333) A mistake I have made
The price. I continue paying
Sitting by myself wishing for help
To get out of this hard thing called
Hell. It twirls around me like a
Dark magical cloak of a lie
You can't help but tell
That it is not over
Just yet, this
Heartrending
Dread



We know it will never let
Go now. Hurts thinking we have
Dropped on down. We've reached bottom
For that price we do pay now each day
Another one promise broken away. We
Tell ourselves that now we may
Break off this habit we've
Found. Keep saying It
May be finally our
One last time.
Hoping for
Hope



And now Fighting against time!

These are supposed to be hearts but it's not working.


message 11: by Billie Jo (new)

Billie Jo (jojolov333) This is about my Aunt whom I was named after. She died at 6 weeks old and now I have her name. :)

For You, Dear Aunt Billie Jo

After you
I was named.
Because our day of birth
Was almost the same.

If I would have waited
Three more days
Then that day
Would be the same.

Because of days
So close yet so far away.
Me and you, dear aunt,
Have the same name.

I love you so
Even though we’ve never met
But that’s okay
Just because that time was not yet.

I will see you there
Sitting high above the world
Looking down from Heaven
Where one day, I’ll meet the Lord.

You are so dear,
To me in every way
And I know you can’t be here
Because Heaven is just too far away.

But I love you lots,
I love our name.
And Aunt Billie Jo
I would never wish it another way.


message 12: by Ms. (new)

Ms. Anderson (whatwhat) | 8 comments Very good!


message 13: by Ms. (new)

Ms. Anderson (whatwhat) | 8 comments Can I try to make one?


message 14: by Billie Jo (new)

Billie Jo (jojolov333) Jovana wrote: "Can I try to make one?"

Yes you can. Anyone can post one or try to make a poem.


message 15: by Billie Jo (new)

Billie Jo (jojolov333) Jovana wrote: "Very good!"

And thanks! :). My 2nd cousin read this and started crying. :(


message 16: by Melanie (new)

Melanie Lipka | 3 comments My poem about love.

Valentine

A valentine is nothing like
A chocolate or a rose
For in a week these shall be gone,
But valentines remain

If love were always sweet to taste
Or fragrant to the nose
Each day would be like Valentine's
And we would go insane

A valentine just hangs around
Waiting to be kissed
Long after special days have passed
And every days are here

So one is wise to choose one well
And chocolates to resist
For in the midst of mania
It's nice to have one near


message 17: by Melanie (new)

Melanie Lipka | 3 comments If anyone is interested, I am currently writing new poems and a new book called Behind My Naked Eye please take the time to read it leave a comment on how you feel about it anything! Thank you so much! It is under my writing and read read read! Hope you like it!


message 18: by Billie Jo (new)

Billie Jo (jojolov333) I like your poem. :) And I will try to read your book too.


message 19: by Melanie (new)

Melanie Lipka | 3 comments Awww Thank you!


message 21: by [deleted user] (new)

Those are awesome!


❄️ Propertea Of Frostea ❄️ Bitter SnoBerry ❄ (berrynumey) You could 'like' them Ace:) So that my friends know I have talent:)


message 23: by [deleted user] (new)

Ok I will.


message 25: by JazzyCat (new)

JazzyCat (dayandnightgirl) | 13 comments Billie Jo wrote: "Ti Amo ♥just love♥ wrote: "Here's mine. :) Some are pretty old, from back when I was really depressed.


http://www.goodreads.com/story/list/7..."

I like your poetry! You're good. :)"


Sorry it took me so long to reply but thank you so much! :D What did you like?


message 26: by Billie Jo (new)

Billie Jo (jojolov333) All of it. And btw, I can't get on much anymore. But when Fall break and or winter break come around I'll get on more.


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