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Excited to read, but already noticed several typos/missing words in the first few pages. It happens if course and won’t affect my rating, but was enough to be a little distracting so early on.

Feels EXTREMELY rushed. Chapter is unbearably sloppy, even compared to pacing issues previously, as the prose doesn’t seem to have as much thought in it. Feels like the first draft of a sudden idea that was written in without editing to make it actually fit. Also VERY disappointing to have the major conflict the last few chapters were leading up to brushed over with a couple of careless sentences. Considering a DNF

Chapter 6 is definitely the weakest chapter so far. Large blocks of text about multiple topics/actions that should have been broken up into separate paragraphs, very unnatural-reading dialogue, a lot of exposition in the narration trying to tell us every little detail no matter if its actually relevant to what is happening, and more rushed than usual. To put it perhaps a little harshly: it feels like a first draft.

Has been good so far, besides feeling rushed. Narrative prose is very good, though some of the dialogue feels stilted and unnatural; used more for exposition than natural interaction in some parts. If pacing was improved, this issue could probably be avoided.

It’s alright. Story is interesting but pacing could be improved. Chapter 2 felt like several different chapters pushed together and rushed. As the story so far is supposed to have happened over several days it would have been nice to have seen each day/event expanded on instead of shown for 2-4 paragraphs and then moved on from.

Not terrible, feels pretty rushed though. Sorta just going “Oh? Okay. I guess this is happening now.” the entire time. Can’t really get a feel for who the character is so far. Has lots of potential though and I’m hoping for a reason to actually care about Violet other than “she’s the main character” because like… who IS she?

Writing feels very flat. Characters aren’t very likeable.

No indication on the physical book that this is book 2 of a series, so I’m trying to be kinder about the plot because I haven’t read book 1, but its so cliche I really don’t feel like I NEED to go back and read book 1; all mentions to it seem to imply an extremely generic plot build.

Huge shame, as I enjoyed Beast Quest as a kid.

I love this old man and I’ll be bloody devo if anything happens to him

Pages 25 and 26 are exceptionally adorable

???? Why are they SITTING there. 3 pages ago they were talking about how urgently they had to leave before the BBEG showed up. Now they’re just sitting there eating cheese, seemingly forgetting that they themselves, and not just the reader, have the knowledge that the villain is on the way???

God the fatphobia is actually getting unbearable at this point. All the nasty characters are overweight. We get it. Shut up about it for 5 minutes and focus on something more important