Irina > Recent Status Updates

This is good, but sometimes he prattles on too much about unimportant details. I don't care THAT much about the layout of an old store, for example. And don't describe 5 unimportant baseball cards or some such. It's too flavor, but I prefer a smaller sample of it.

I'm concerned that every chapter seems to be a single scene. That may make this hard to get through. Page breaks and scene breaks, please!

FANTASTIC. Important.