Some thoughts as I read:
First-person, past tense is hard to do well. Some phrasing sounds odd because of it.
The timeline from treating Ella poorly to pursuing her/getting physical with her is too rushed, even a novella under 200 pages.
I thought Ella's door was locked when she snuck out to go to the festival/ball. How was she going to get back in her room it at didn't crawl back in through the window?
— Jun 10, 2026 11:14PM
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