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“Not all those who wander are lost”

Good overall and very descriptive. Dialogue is a little bit off though

“I confess that I still regard mushrooms and mushroom eaters with a good deal of suspicion. Oh, I’ve acquired the necessary veneer of pretentious sophistication all right — enough to eat and to keep my opinions to myself, so I’m cool and all. But I still don’t understand about mushroom and mushroom eaters— not entirely, anyhow.” Page 146. Lol

The way the 1st chapter was written is not like the rest of the book. Seems to be a lack of focus in some of these chapters