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Very lovely. I should read more short fiction.

Yolen's use of words is quite mesmerizing. "Her hair was red and curled about her face like little fishhooks ready to catch the unwary ogler" what!!!!!

"...consider Balthazar to be a cylinder of radius r and height h..."

This seems kind of bad so far, we'll see if it's fun bad or annoying bad

Jerichau deserved better

Wasn't expecting the racism and police brutality and racist police brutality

That went off the rails real fast

Dude.

I'm not sure I quite understand the way this is structured. So we have multiple "books", with several parts in each book, and then chapters in each part which are numbered with roman numerals, and then each chapter has numbered... sections? Subchapters? I'm not clear on the purpose of the numbered subchapters.

It's a little hard to keep track of all the levels of numbering.

Maybe the prose is a little *too* purple. "Sat with the ruins of his gluttony" is a bit much just for eating an egg sandwich, no? Also there are some parts where the phrasing affects the clarity of the sentence, e.g. the "Though in her early adulthood..." line on page 29.

This prose is gorgeous so far

Dorothea is such a bad bitch