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Wait… she‘s already 35? When he doesn‘t turn her into a vampire like he won‘t in the tv show they really won‘t have much time together before she grows old and then before dies. Not sure how their ending even could be called a HEA.

The yoga studio scene is.. ridiculous.
Also with having watched the tv show first: how wrong was the casting for the MMC? He doesn’t match book Matthew at all.

There it is. Another „making the abuser seem nice“ yuckfest. So because Valen washes her hair he is still an option for the endgame? Just, eww.
Again, what is the lesson of this series should he be the endgame? „So your abuser, the man who violated you was nice from time to time. You should stay with him.“ Ewwwwww.

Bla bla bla, „I want you to pay for what your father did to me.“ Valen, you are pathetic.
If he is the endgame it would be like the author wanting to teach the lesson that every abuser has the right to abuse his victims just because he had endured the same. And the abused should just learn to love him and stay with him. YUCK!

Yep, Miri at this point doesn’t deserve Death. He deserves better.

*gag* Everything between Miri and Valen is just ewww.

Eww, ewww, ewwwww. Why the desire for Valen? An abusive piece of shit, like the tamlinest of Tamlins, just with dark hair, is not something to be desired. Ewwwwww.

If Valen is the endgame this series as a whole will not only be one stars, I will also fu**ing burn the books. What a great lesson an endgame with Valen would teach: Yes he abused, raped and humiliated you but but but poor guy had a tragic backstory! Eww. Just eww.

Sooo.. if Valen ends up as the endgame in book three the lesson of the triology would be: You should stay with your abuser who tortured and humiliated you because he made you come (against your will). He better not be the endgame.

Has anyone proof-read this? Like at all?
„I will take what is not given“? There is a „not“ missing when the topic is all about him wanting her consent.

After so many delays with the publishing I expected there to be less missed in the editing. The errors take me out of the story. Like here, a man being described as having brown hair only to have mentioned it again two sentences later.

So far it is a bit too obvious this book would have needed more proof reads and another round of editing. But it‘s a debut novel, so no DNF yet.

The „then“ instead of „than“ on this page hurts. Then there sometimes seems to be half of sentences missing. Another time the moons were too bright to hide. Then suddenly there are dark clouds, the next page the dark clouds are mentioned again as if that‘s new