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Beautiful. Absolutely beautiful

Okay now it’s getting GOOD finally. There’s a plot and a love story. More than just what’s happening around campus. I love how poetic Joan is about the universe and her beliefs

I feel like Evelyn is related to Monique in some way. Or that she’s related to the family. There’s something there. Why else would she only give the story to her, the other alternative being no one gets it at all?

Asking the real questions

JUICY

What happened to the girl who was so meticulous about numbers in the first chapter. Everything down to the minute. Now she’s planning a wedding on a whim at the last second? Doesn’t put much energy into buying a wedding dress? Doesn’t care where or when she gets married? Is this the same person?

Why are we still neglecting David’s plot line. Author is just going to drop that he has that look in his eyes and ignore it for many chapters?? Just a quick chapter in LA and then suddenly back in NYC??? So much is being left out. It feels so rushed with wedding planning too. Is the loft the same party she sees in the dream??

2/2 Why hasn’t Bella asked Dannie why she calls Greg, Aaron. It also feels like a similar build up to “expiration dates”. I’m guessing she dumps David due to being overworked? Bella dies and then Dannie and Aaron bond over all losses? GAH

GAAAHHHHHH still a page turner. Holy cow.

I can feel they’re leaving out David quite a bit. I didn’t understand why Ariel and someone else were included in the beach trip and hardly mentioned. Beach trip felt cut short and David wasn’t present (1/2)

Um. Wow. 0-100 real quick. Quite the opening. But also why did we just skip a whole 4.5 years like it was nothing? Just a few sentences when she started out the book with minute by minute detail. Seems rushed to get to wherever we’re going so far. It is a page turner

I can tell that she’s either going to be written off the book due to her condition, be with Jake forever; or decide to go back to Hugo but on her own terms, not from the papers.

The back / forth POV between past and present is a little irritating. No indication which time it is set in. Takes about 1.5 pages of guessing to figure it out even a month / year at the top of the chapter would be helpful. Kinda repetitive