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“She lost more than double her body weight”

…what?

Andrew is nearly caught by a neighbor due to loud screams from Sarah, so he goes and immediately makes her scream some more? And the neighbor doesn’t call the cops? K.

And you’re going to sit there and tell me the dad didn’t smell the burnt flesh, the blood and pus, the shit? The bedroom had to look like a crime scene and he just walked away!

Page 2, “fitted”.

I should DNF, but I’ll keep going. I’m going to come back to this later and berate myself for not just throwing it away now. Alas…

On page 1 and I already see a grammar error. Off to a great start. 😩

Again, name mix-up. Says Holly when Grace would have been correct. 🥹

Twice now I’ve noticed name mistakes. “Mr. Zachary” when it should have been Mr. Baker or Barker or whatever. Then here on page 110, a mix up of Holly when it should say Grace.

Not a deal breaker but it really does set me back.

That formaldehyde would immediately cause a reaction in Calico.

Also, the page randomly cuts off. Not a deal breaker, but come on…?

“Religious figureheads being chemically forced to rape invalids and deformees. Who could think of something like that? Who could possibly want such a thing?”

lol. 🙋🏼‍♀️

Just get past the first chapter.

Finally.

Character fluctuations kind of annoying. Grant is written like he has this internal moral conflict, “hates” that he has to be part of the killing of his family, but then his cock is getting hard at the prospect of raping his 17 year old niece. Alright.

Lindsey contemplates what she wants: being able to maintain a normal life or turn murder into a career. Decides on the second, returns to the first.

Meh…

Second half better than the first half, but still, wish the author did some research.

Tortured and raped for weeks, running through the woods, breaking down, throwing up, collapsing from exhaustion for five days.

“Sure, let’s have sex.” I get it’s a smut but COME ON.

Also, developing Stockholm syndrome for Kraven after a few days is fucking wild. 🙄

Ok ok by the third guy raping her she finally reacts like a normal person. I guess this one isn’t hot or chiseled enough. In fact, he isn’t, because he’s described as unattractive. Remember folks, rape is okay as long as he’s hot… I guess. 💀🙄

Fucking hate this trope, yet here I am, still reading. The violence at least keeps me entertained.

Smut doesn’t have to have such shallow characters.

We gotta stop guys. She’s being violently raped yet in the moment she’s thinking about how hot her rapist is, and of course she cums thrice. Then, by the gods, she doesn’t have a gag reflex.

I want to say this is written by a man, but worse, it’s written by a woman who only reads shit written by men (or by other woman subject to the same shit). It’s so cringe I want to throw up.

Okay. I pray we are over the near-death-experience-but-too-horny-to-care shit. Also, the forced chemistry between the two characters is agonizing. They’ve known each other a week and bro lowkey in love and it’s just nauseating.

Well, I hope they finally give her real fear. Please don’t make her some defiant attitude line they do in YA novels. Please…

Ugh, it’s so cringe. Kaelin, in the middle of the wilderness, blood loss, adrenalin fading, stuck with a confessed dangerous man.

“Up close his presence is dominating and aggressive and damn my body for liking it.”

Why do people write like this?! Like smut doesn’t have to be so FUCKING STUPID

I feel like I’m going to struggle, but I will carry on… for now.