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shawty weird asf for letting a mystical bull impregnate her

ok now it’s not so bad, the story has begun progressing past sounding like the bible with ten million names in a row.

her grandmother warned her that Glaucos must give something in return, lest he become greedy and ungrateful. and what did he do? he became ungrateful as fuck. always listen to the older women, they speak truth

maybe i’m just bored but it reads poorly. i can’t grasp what the plot is and there’s few pointers on what said plot actually is. obviously i know what it is because of the description, but i feel like your first 15 pages should give a pointer or two. it doesn’t flow the same way SOA does.