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“I guess the Roman lions thought they were close to heaven too, since they were gifted with all those prisoners to eat.”

Tamara Vardomskaya writes a good story. The pacing is great and it’s a pleasant fantasy. There’s a couple of contradictions, but I assume they were needed for the narrative.

Monologue from antagonist.

they are always always from brooklyn. — “…being from brooklyn…”

Not good when an author get bored and fast-forwards through the backstory.

I’m trying to make sense of these inverted caricatures

the punk scene in this book not having parties is wild to me.

I’m convinced that the author is just throwing in cultural buzz words

this book does not pass the Bechdel test

“her hero Patti Smith”

Billy, the heartthrob with a Camaro.

Funny. The Ramones is her spiritual awakening

ah. so this is a grotesque horror

ah. a cursed magical ring.

“bookies”

hmm. odd start. voices, getting naked, a mezuzah, a rabbi.

Diction in this story is pretty clinical and functional; factual and calm, like a report.

HOLLOW IN THE HOPE by Aimee Ogden. Reading this for the third time to try to make sense of it.

“They seemed to be conversing with him amicably, as if nothing had happened. That sank her surge of hopeful trust a bit. To be sure, they were courtiers. It wasn’t their business to quarrel, or to judge and disapprove. And he was a wizard, and their host’s wizard. Still, she thought, they needn’t have walked and talked with him quite so comfortably.”

“…she would not give the child to them. They were all men aboard the ship.”

Chapter 9: Misogyny

Chapter 8: Ged leaves.

another surprise visitor

“Mage of Re Albi sends for you.” “He sent you?” Goha inquired’

author says the vine prefers the tomato plant and calls it a choice.

is it memory or is it a threshold?

author phrases evolution as if it’s intentional. or a one-generation process.

Author taking a hard turn into mysticism.

Nice writing. But author is missing or omitted some context info.

Cob just leaves.