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Read "Garden of Legion," which I loved. Holy cow, demonic tumble weeds!

Finished "Fangs of the Dragon," which, overall, was a good story, with a betrayal, the scene where Porter makes friends with the giant dragon-snake felt more appropriate for a humorous tall-tale than for the tone these stories tend to have. It was a bit over-the top. Fewer plural/possessive errors, but still a lot of comma errors - and two spelling errors.

Read "Tangle Crowned Demon." It was a pretty basic story, without a lot of stakes, but it was okay. Lots of comma errors, though.

Finished "Rolling in the Deep," which I kind of liked. The grammar and spelling errors are distracting, to say the least. But I enjoyed the story. It had a deux ex machina ending, with Porter not really doing anything to extricate himself from the situation, but letting God handle it.

I'm just three pages into the next story (Rolling in the Deep), and already there are five errors. "You didn't ask Agnes" sounds like someone didn't ask Agnes' permission, but what he meant was "You didn't ask, Agnes." He was talking to Agnes. Commas matter! Then, "He was a close friend of your late fathers." Sounds like she has multiple dead dads. It should be "He was a close friend of your late father's."

Continued. But I like what the author was trying to do. The jail scene was excellent, and the threat was palpable and, frankly, horrifying. I'd love to see a revised version of this story where the descriptions of what is going on was stronger, and "Joshua" identified.

Continued from last comment. At one point, Porter says the US cavalry was there, and I didn't read about them showing up, so I had to backtrack, and all there was to indicate someone new on the scene was the sound of a trumpet - which could have been anything, especially when the Bokkor was described as a "black magic piper."

At the end of the story, Porter shoots "Joshua." No one named Joshua was in the story.

Read "Soma for the Destroying Angels Soul." Note the spelling error in the title. "Angels" is plural - It should be "Angel's," which is possessive. The author makes a couple of these errors in this story, too, but mostly he makes comma errors.

I liked the overall story, but it felt like a draft version. It was TOO fast-paced, leaving me confused as to the action and plot at times.

The next story is "Black Wings in the Moonlight," which was a decent story about a supernatural bird and a ghost. I like the character of Porter. So many near misses, though. The biggest issue is the same as the last story - spelling errors. 12-page story with 12 spelling or grammar errors. The author seems to continue to struggle with possessives and plurals, and definitely has a problem with "it's" and "its."

Finished the first story, the title story, Cold Slither. I liked it, but was surprised at all the spelling errors (the author spells "through" as "thru" and often confuses possessives with plurals and vice versa). But the main character of Porter is interesting, and thought the adventure was entertaining.

I love how the president is "President Donner." A) The Donner party and capitalism, and B) Donner means "thunder" in German - President Thunder, basically a lot of noise. Again Butler is prescient on how people think President Donner is God or sent by God, the cut programs, suspending laws (including environmental laws and worker protection laws), is just nothing short of predictive.

Very prescient. Already predicted that cabinet members did not need to have any expertise in what they are heading up, just good at politics - and political leaders are running on abolishing programs and departments.