Keith > Recent Status Updates

"She also wanted to punch her brother, well, half-brother, but he’d get a whole punch."

“They grow up so fast,” she says, wistfully. “One minute they’re looking at you like you have all the answers, the next they’re being vague and sarcastic and sneaking out at night."

"we should continue to monitor and that I should try to prevent you from doing anything stupid. I am in the process of replying that there are too many independent variables to account for all the stupid courses of action you are capable of.”

I really hate it when male MCs say "it will be ok, really it will, I promise, I will take care of it" etc over and over again WHEN THERE IS NO WAY THEY CAN PROMISE THAT.

Dear lord, enough with the foreshadowing already. It's at 90%, I know there is a climax approaching, you don't need to beat me over the head with it.

This book is going nowhere

Men tended to test new rivals first, and then extend them membership in the group. Women did things the other way around, usually.

"At its root, politics is the peaceful allocation of scarce resources."

"Judging a man on what he said was foolish, on what he did was wise."

Self absorbed MC is annoying. Also leads to a lack of exposition / description about the world.

“She’s fine, you know.”

“She’s making demands of her kidnappers to fetch her things, of course she’s fine.”

“What’s a subplot?” Ean looked to his father. “Is it like punctuation? ’cause I still don’t get why people are so worked up about commas.”

The wisdom of a 9 year old (flashback)

Not enjoying the insta lust here, seems contrived. Emperors Edge and Fallen Empire did the slow burn much better.

“I mean I think she likes you. You know. How a girl likes a boy?” She pursed her lips speculatively. “You do know about that, right? See, when a girl and a boy like each other, or maybe have just had too much to drink, they—”