No I didn't finish dozens of pages in a minute, I just rechecked Libby and was further along than I thought. Wanted to point out how many irrational hand movements he includes. "[He] runs a finger up and down, indicating the other man's body." I get the idea behind it, but the phrasing feels... Very weird, and there's several other points where the "gestures" pulled me out of the story
— Aug 10, 2023 06:14PM
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