More awkward sentences. They are distracting me from the story. I'm finding my mind rearranging words to make sentences less awkward. Another example. "The largest room on the ground floor, wherein he now sat, was given over to his consulting salon, complete with an outrageously expensive leather couch, matching chair, and a valuable, finely crafted desk at which he wrote his patients' notes." very distracting.
— Jul 27, 2011 01:56PM
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