This is a good story, but it is need of some editing. It randomly changes POV - sometimes you are told, sometimes you are not, and it may or may not be at chapter change. That makes for a very jarring story that could easily be smoothed. There are several typos (or grammatical errors). To instead of too, missing letters and I corrected spelling. Chapter 41 includes a section that is repeated as chapter 42.
— Nov 25, 2025 08:49AM
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