First reactions: too many adjectives and adverbs! I wonder if it’s because there are two authors and they were trying to include everything both writers wanted to say, but I’ve already read several passages like “her long, silky navy skirt” and “they were unreasonably proud of him” and “curly unruly dark hair.” I think it waters down the text.
— Nov 08, 2023 04:43AM
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