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Enjoying the story so far but find the many, many sloppy mistakes very distracting.
Trying to help the self published author by sending content error notes, but I’m not and don’t want to be a teacher with red pen in hand.

Although I’m enjoying the story so far, reminded of personal favourites like “1984” and especially “Brave new world” , the many mistakes are annoying.
Examples:
canvass (verb) instead of canvas (noun, heavy cloth).
‘Ash bellowing (scream) ’ instead of “billowing”.
‘... know who you’re ...’ should certainly be “who you are”.
‘... engineering feet’ instead of “feat”
Many more.

Fascinating. Scary. Thought provoking. Disgusting. Interesting. Questioning.

I'm enjoying this continued story immensely. If "enjoy" is the right word in this case.

Can't get into it.

Can't get into it.

Can't get into it.

Quote:
"Once they understand that evil—the way that we understand it—we will be out of time.”
--- Bobby Adair

27% in:
The story is holding my attention and I'm neglecting my vacuuming.
Quote :

"This is what reality looks like now, Miss Idealism. Get on board with it, or pack your shit and go home.”

Finished first book and loved it! Started second.

Finished first book and loved it! Started second.

The characters grabbed me from the first few pages, with their history and own demons revealed bit by bit. “See yourself creating goals. Think of what you need to do to achieve those goals. And then, imagine the reward of hitting those goals.”