First story down. Concept was cool, the writing was okay, but the dialogue made me stop multiple times, and roll my eyes when, yes, they really did just say 'it's as if my dreams are the closed bud of a rose, and the truth is merely the opening of the flower...' No one talks like that. And if they do, they deserve all the eyerolls. The writing felt pretentious to me, and trying hard to make the chars like geniuses.
— Jul 31, 2016 02:32PM
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