He pulls out at the last possible second. The head rush from that first lungful of oxygen nearly knocks Chris backward. His chest clenches; the fresh air burns his lungs but tastes so sweet. His obedient mouth hangs open, drooling thick, red-streaked mucus.
The plot is interesting, but the grammar is making it difficult to read. This paragraph is talking about two people. Having to reread parts makes it difficult t
— Mar 03, 2026 11:31AM
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