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“It’s not a bother, Cole. You’re injured, and I’m here to help you feel as good as you can. Now,

I’m going to have to lose a few pounds, or I’m going to rip the dress if I try to get it off by myself

Use of word diapers

The thing about heartbreak was that I knew how to cover it up so I didn’t bring everyone down with me. I plastered a smile on my face and stared outside. “It really is amazing. We’re so lucky to be here.”

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Her breakup only happened the day before… ugh

Her jaw was set tight, and she hung on to my phone. “What are you doing?” “I’m doing you a favor.” With a slight scowl, she handed the phone back to me. “No more texts or photos of Andrew. And no more texts to stare at.” “Shalini!” I shouted. She pointed at the glass. “Look out the window, Ava. You’re missing it. And he’s not worth it.”

It’s good so far. But there’s a lot of internal monologue from the two main characters in first person point of view… I found when there’s passages of world building, history, politics covered through both MMC and FMC’s POV- it typically is written in third person. Different; not bad, but different

Phoebe, the only one who has put her shoes back on, quickly kicks them off, looking forlornly at the copper-colored slippers. They have encrusted jewels along the edge, a luxury I could never afford. She thinks she’ll never wear them again. Good for her! She also makes her own path.

My gaze snaps from my mates to the Neutro. All my doubts about the Rite of Flight disappear.

I haven’t even finished this yet and I already know it will be one of my favourite books

I really really am enjoying this book

Good suspense and mystery surrounding the magical world we’re introduced to.

Very promising start!!

High fantasy NA, use of words are distracting to reader for the time period/world setting such as “baby” as term of endearment, and calling clothing items ”pyjamas”
Anachronistic word choice

It’s good, characters are interesting, but slow momentum at this stage. Not much has happened yet a lot has happened if that makes sense

Great tension and suspense so far

Not as horrific but similar to The Handmaid’s Tale