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7) "The Hunter she knew had died seven years ago in a raid." so, bad first job ay?
15) i mean she got busted with the alarm, clearly she's not qualified?

3) "machine rumbled deep in its belly" so motor? not battery? wasn't it displayed as decore, why does it have fuel inside?
4) "Bullets sang past them" no more laser guns ?
6) "Damn her cheap implant. She should have sprung for the nucleospatial model she'd thought was too expensive" you mean she went for the cheap alternative for a brain surgery?

3) "Her laser pistol would run out of charge long before she was done fighting her way out of here" so thats the one from the safe. So you came unarmed ?
3) "machine rumbled deep in its belly" so motor? not battery?

2) "New Rome Colony" ? lol
2) "At twenty-three" "starting out seven years ago" so started at 16. but : "This was a rookie mistake, one she hadn't made since she was thirteen."

1) "downloaded the building schematics from the net" of the (Cordozas) super bad guys' castle.. really? You mean the public blueprints for "their clearinghouse for the smuggled items and drugs they sent out across the universe"?
2) this mission will be enough to 'buy her a small planet' and she weights herself down with "coin bags" and "several stacks of credits"?

"downloaded the building schematics from the net" of the super bad guys' castle.. really?

Torture ?! they can read minds !!

mouahaha

I like the writing style. the mother is a bit extreme emotionally in my opinion.

I like the art style. Nice pace.