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This is my voice to text notes that I’m placing here for safekeeping. Any thoughts or suggestions or volunteer editors are more than welcome to comment or message me and let me know what you think. Again this is the literal transcript from me just getting the story off of my head and i Down on paper. Because of the voice to text, there’s gonna be a lot of errors. I do have a deep southern accent that doesn’t always transcribe correctly and I didn’t want to break up my train of thought by stopping and editing every couple seconds. That said here is what was going through my head . I invite you all to take a journey with me from scratch to finish works. This is my process. Here we go. …
I would like to write a short script or Young adult Contemporary fiction Book about addressing the topic of racism and bigotry as it applies to the 60s and 70s versus today.
I would like it to outline this story perimeter.
There’s an old woman who used to be a nurse in the Korean war and possibly Vietnam I don’t know I’ll think about the timeframe there if it would work or not and she was married to someone who was quite the rebel in his time. Always in and out of trouble with the wall until he was drafted into the war where they met and fell. They moved to New Orleans after the war got married and settled down. They never had any children but always had a house full of people who needed their help. At one point in time their house was the local meeting place for the Black Panthers during the mid 70s.
After that they helped with various other activist groups to protect the neighborhood, to community, kids, animals, etc. She retired from nursing and became a teacher for a short while at a local high school. Her husband died of lung cancer around this time and so she moved into a smaller house in a rougher side of town.
Our current story takes place with her living in this neighborhood and her little two bedroom shotgun house in the area of uptown New Orleans. There are some boys that age from 12 to about 16 that hang out at a bus stop bench next to a convenient store which happens to be right across the street from where she lives so they are often in her yard or sometimes even sitting on her stoop.
They’re rambunctious they play their music and they curse in the yell but she doesn’t mind them because these were the kind of people she has hung out with most of her adult life. She is white her husband was black they were married in a time where that was unacceptable and they had to fight a lot of hardships because of it. the boys are mixed races from various families Hispanic, black, Puerto Rican, etc. etc. I want to be sure that we don’t stay on any topic of it of anyone of their races we’ll leave it up to ambiguously suggested.
These are not bad kids they just act like they act given their backgrounds and neighborhood and environment.
They all have working moms or dads who aren’t there as much to look after them. Some of the other older neighbors who have been there for a long time have called the police on them and they’re always out there yelling at them one lady even put a hose onto them and sprayed them with water tell them them to get off of the sidewalk in front of her house she went out and offered little boy a towel his name is Hector and invited him and his three friends for cookies baked that day.
Will assume it’s winter time or something so it’s not that cold but for New Orleans it’s still pretty cold but not needing mittens and a heavy coat or anything like that. Just a regular jacket. So the boys hesitantly come in they assume she’s safe and it’s OK to do so because they see her all the time and everyone kind of knows who she is.
She insist that they call her parents and let them know that they have come inside a strangers house and where they are in case their parents come look for them and that they are trying to stay there and have cookies as long as they need to
As the boys are having their milk and cookies and being very polite they’ve all taken off their baseball caps because they know not to wear them inside they took their shoes off at the door they offered to help clean up the dish and put away any dishes or anything like that that she needs help with and she told him no you guys just relax and they noticed some of the pictures on the wall which have things like her and her husband with her fist raised in the air And Newspaper articles cut out of them battling crowds and standing up against the oppressors and things of that nature and they are fascinated now with the history of the guardian angels which was a neighborhood watch program and the Black Panthers which they have only heard about through rap songs and YouTube shorts so they really didn’t know that white people could be part of the black panthers or what the Black Panthers actually stood for what they believe in and how they Tried to unite to help the community rise up against oppression not just African-Americans.
Miss Tina offers the boys to come over anytime after school that they don’t want to just hang out outside while they’re waiting for the parents to get home or what not and she’ll tell them more stories about her time in other countries and fighting for the freedoms of America and being a true community leader . And so the boys come back often and always enjoy her fresh baked cookies even learning how to make them themselves.
One day James and African-American and Cuban mixed boy is talking about how cool Miss Tina‘s husband must’ve been over dinner with his family his mom and his two brothers and his youngest sister. Getting overly excited his little sister raises her fist and air and says fight the power after hearing one of the stories that Miss Tina had told him and he was retelling.
The older brother of James gets upset Stand up knocking his chair and upsetting his mother and telling his brother we don’t need some white savior coming in here and filling your head up with nonsense.
You need to get a job or go do something else after school like come help me on my delivery route. But you don’t need to go over to some white ladies house tell you how she’s such a strong fighter for racially quality and we are not. James gets understandably upset and tells his brother that that’s not at all what goes on over there and she never said we are not community leaders she just explained it different back then.
Which makes several bigoted comments against a white snowflake and white fragility and white privilege and things like that basically just repeating a lot of the ignorant rhetoric that goes around Internet sub credits and YouTube shorts things like that.
All of it propaganda. James’s mother calms down the boys and has them sit down and finish their dinner and go put the dishes up. While they’re putting the dishes up James’s older brother tells him that it’s weird that an old lady would want to hang out with with a bunch of little boys and that he’s gonna do something to stop it because that’s not right she has no reason to hang out with some little kids except maybe she’s a creeper. James knows his heart isn’t true because Tina is good and kind and she’s just trying to do what’s right by these boys and the brothers taking it all wrong…
So later that night the brothers hanging out on the stoop with some of his friends who are all losers drug dealers and petty criminals. The brother is just shooting off at the mouth about how this lady needs to be stopped she is filling up his brothers head with all this nonsense and that it’s weird that some old lady wants to have all of these young Urban kids around all the time she must be up to no good. This gets some of the older guys all riled up and one of them asks where she lives the brother says oh you know just right over there across from RJ corner Mart.
The boys know exactly where this is because it’s where a lot of the kids in the neighborhood go get snacks, cigarettes, And hang out in front of. One of the older boys is a real no good slimeball who sells drugs to kids and was wondering why he kept seeing people go in and out of that house lately.
A couple of days later Jason the drug dealer and two of his Lacys decide they’re going to go and rob this woman’s house they wait across the street at the store until the last boy has left her house and she’s waved everybody goodbye and turned off the lights but 20 minutes later they kick the door and they go in and they start to rob the place one of the drugged out Criminals goes into her room where she is shaking and holding a baseball bat and warning him not to come any closer he sees that her phone is off the hook and letting her on the floor and assume she must’ve just called the police.
So he lunges at her knocking her over and into her writing desk which was set up in the corner of her room. When she doesn’t respond he gets spooked and runs out tell the boys let’s go let’s go.. The police show up and they come inside to see everything in her beautiful cozy home has been smashed and destroyed there’s lamps broken on the ground Even the cookie jar that was in the middle of the table that the boys loved coming and finding out which flavor she had made for him that day was now smashed and broken off the wall that everyone admired on the floor broken glass everywhere. The police check the downstairs and see that there’s no one there they go upstairs And find her nonresponsive on the bedroom floor and ambulance takes her to the hospital. She’s recovering from a broken hip and a lot of bruises but she is going to be OK.
All of the boys in the neighborhood go to visit her even James is big brother who goes with tears on his face and apologizes For starting all the trouble in the first place. She forgives him and hug. All the parents in the neighborhood who kids she helped both the streets for decades show up and bring her flowers and thank her. Her entire hospital room is full of flowers and balloons and get well cards. The boys are all found.
Tina comes out of the hospital and goes home and is recovering nicely. Upon arriving home she sees that the neighborhood has come in and cleaned up all of the mess replaced everything that was broken including a cookie jar that the six younger boys made her in our class and has all of their signatures on it. Her pictures have been reframed and matted and look lovely. There is a digital frame that some of the parents pull together to get her which has all of the pictures scanned into it so she never has to lose them or worry about them ever again. Along the side of the pictures of her husband and her throughout the years are now pictures of all of the kids she has helped. Going as far back as the 60s and 70s. There are pictures of the boys playing baseball across the street when it used to be a dirt lot before it was the gas station pictures of the boys and girls married and their children. Pictures of them graduating high school and Miss Tina standing next to them with a big smile on her faceshining with pride.
During the cleanup project to community realized just how much she cared and how many lives she had helped with her kindness and her refusal to judge anyone based on how they looked the color of their skin.
The small time crooks have been held in court and they are about to be arraigned and they’re going before the judge and journey. The whole neighborhood wants these boys to have serious punishment for what they did to such a sweet old lady. But Miss Tina has a different plan. She knows that they are just troubled And need an opportunity to show that they can be different and be a positive impact on the city of New Orleans instead of drain it.
She shows up to Court the day that the boys are supposed to have their arraignment. She tells the judge not to go harshly on them. And offers a suggestion of them working within the community to help The younger generation to stay off the streets. She suggest job Corps or the OTC program for the boys the judge ask the boys what they think about the suggestion and they are all very ready to agree they’ve been in jail now for enough time to detox off of drugs and they are all saying things a lot more clearly. So they agreed to go into a Bootcamp program Where they have the option to go to the military.
Missy each one of the boys through their graduations she gets letters from the boys that had broken into her house who are all now serving in the military and living fine upstanding citizens lives. She dies in her sleep in her home and there’s a beautiful scene of her husband showing up And she is back to being her youthful self and he tells her that she’s needed elsewhere her job is done. She jumps up and runs over and hugs him he spins her around and they go into the light together.
Opens up in a History classroom with James who is now a high school history teacher And he has just finished giving a lesson about how one person can make a difference and Unite a community and that ripple effect could change the world.
As students all pay a lot of room there’s one kid still remaining. He looks like the rough and tumble type very similar to what James and his friends look like back in the 90s. I think your stories bullshit.
James simply stands up from his desk walks over to a file cabinet where sits on top of the file cabinet is a cookie jar with a bunch of signatures on it James takes the top off and the jar says wanna cook and takes and James sits down and then across the student and says do you wanna talk about it and this is the end of our story
I would like to write a short script or Young adult Contemporary fiction Book about addressing the topic of racism and bigotry as it applies to the 60s and 70s versus today.
I would like it to outline this story perimeter.
There’s an old woman who used to be a nurse in the Korean war and possibly Vietnam I don’t know I’ll think about the timeframe there if it would work or not and she was married to someone who was quite the rebel in his time. Always in and out of trouble with the wall until he was drafted into the war where they met and fell. They moved to New Orleans after the war got married and settled down. They never had any children but always had a house full of people who needed their help. At one point in time their house was the local meeting place for the Black Panthers during the mid 70s.
After that they helped with various other activist groups to protect the neighborhood, to community, kids, animals, etc. She retired from nursing and became a teacher for a short while at a local high school. Her husband died of lung cancer around this time and so she moved into a smaller house in a rougher side of town.
Our current story takes place with her living in this neighborhood and her little two bedroom shotgun house in the area of uptown New Orleans. There are some boys that age from 12 to about 16 that hang out at a bus stop bench next to a convenient store which happens to be right across the street from where she lives so they are often in her yard or sometimes even sitting on her stoop.
They’re rambunctious they play their music and they curse in the yell but she doesn’t mind them because these were the kind of people she has hung out with most of her adult life. She is white her husband was black they were married in a time where that was unacceptable and they had to fight a lot of hardships because of it. the boys are mixed races from various families Hispanic, black, Puerto Rican, etc. etc. I want to be sure that we don’t stay on any topic of it of anyone of their races we’ll leave it up to ambiguously suggested.
These are not bad kids they just act like they act given their backgrounds and neighborhood and environment.
They all have working moms or dads who aren’t there as much to look after them. Some of the other older neighbors who have been there for a long time have called the police on them and they’re always out there yelling at them one lady even put a hose onto them and sprayed them with water tell them them to get off of the sidewalk in front of her house she went out and offered little boy a towel his name is Hector and invited him and his three friends for cookies baked that day.
Will assume it’s winter time or something so it’s not that cold but for New Orleans it’s still pretty cold but not needing mittens and a heavy coat or anything like that. Just a regular jacket. So the boys hesitantly come in they assume she’s safe and it’s OK to do so because they see her all the time and everyone kind of knows who she is.
She insist that they call her parents and let them know that they have come inside a strangers house and where they are in case their parents come look for them and that they are trying to stay there and have cookies as long as they need to
As the boys are having their milk and cookies and being very polite they’ve all taken off their baseball caps because they know not to wear them inside they took their shoes off at the door they offered to help clean up the dish and put away any dishes or anything like that that she needs help with and she told him no you guys just relax and they noticed some of the pictures on the wall which have things like her and her husband with her fist raised in the air And Newspaper articles cut out of them battling crowds and standing up against the oppressors and things of that nature and they are fascinated now with the history of the guardian angels which was a neighborhood watch program and the Black Panthers which they have only heard about through rap songs and YouTube shorts so they really didn’t know that white people could be part of the black panthers or what the Black Panthers actually stood for what they believe in and how they Tried to unite to help the community rise up against oppression not just African-Americans.
Miss Tina offers the boys to come over anytime after school that they don’t want to just hang out outside while they’re waiting for the parents to get home or what not and she’ll tell them more stories about her time in other countries and fighting for the freedoms of America and being a true community leader . And so the boys come back often and always enjoy her fresh baked cookies even learning how to make them themselves.
One day James and African-American and Cuban mixed boy is talking about how cool Miss Tina‘s husband must’ve been over dinner with his family his mom and his two brothers and his youngest sister. Getting overly excited his little sister raises her fist and air and says fight the power after hearing one of the stories that Miss Tina had told him and he was retelling.
The older brother of James gets upset Stand up knocking his chair and upsetting his mother and telling his brother we don’t need some white savior coming in here and filling your head up with nonsense.
You need to get a job or go do something else after school like come help me on my delivery route. But you don’t need to go over to some white ladies house tell you how she’s such a strong fighter for racially quality and we are not. James gets understandably upset and tells his brother that that’s not at all what goes on over there and she never said we are not community leaders she just explained it different back then.
Which makes several bigoted comments against a white snowflake and white fragility and white privilege and things like that basically just repeating a lot of the ignorant rhetoric that goes around Internet sub credits and YouTube shorts things like that.
All of it propaganda. James’s mother calms down the boys and has them sit down and finish their dinner and go put the dishes up. While they’re putting the dishes up James’s older brother tells him that it’s weird that an old lady would want to hang out with with a bunch of little boys and that he’s gonna do something to stop it because that’s not right she has no reason to hang out with some little kids except maybe she’s a creeper. James knows his heart isn’t true because Tina is good and kind and she’s just trying to do what’s right by these boys and the brothers taking it all wrong…
So later that night the brothers hanging out on the stoop with some of his friends who are all losers drug dealers and petty criminals. The brother is just shooting off at the mouth about how this lady needs to be stopped she is filling up his brothers head with all this nonsense and that it’s weird that some old lady wants to have all of these young Urban kids around all the time she must be up to no good. This gets some of the older guys all riled up and one of them asks where she lives the brother says oh you know just right over there across from RJ corner Mart.
The boys know exactly where this is because it’s where a lot of the kids in the neighborhood go get snacks, cigarettes, And hang out in front of. One of the older boys is a real no good slimeball who sells drugs to kids and was wondering why he kept seeing people go in and out of that house lately.
A couple of days later Jason the drug dealer and two of his Lacys decide they’re going to go and rob this woman’s house they wait across the street at the store until the last boy has left her house and she’s waved everybody goodbye and turned off the lights but 20 minutes later they kick the door and they go in and they start to rob the place one of the drugged out Criminals goes into her room where she is shaking and holding a baseball bat and warning him not to come any closer he sees that her phone is off the hook and letting her on the floor and assume she must’ve just called the police.
So he lunges at her knocking her over and into her writing desk which was set up in the corner of her room. When she doesn’t respond he gets spooked and runs out tell the boys let’s go let’s go.. The police show up and they come inside to see everything in her beautiful cozy home has been smashed and destroyed there’s lamps broken on the ground Even the cookie jar that was in the middle of the table that the boys loved coming and finding out which flavor she had made for him that day was now smashed and broken off the wall that everyone admired on the floor broken glass everywhere. The police check the downstairs and see that there’s no one there they go upstairs And find her nonresponsive on the bedroom floor and ambulance takes her to the hospital. She’s recovering from a broken hip and a lot of bruises but she is going to be OK.
All of the boys in the neighborhood go to visit her even James is big brother who goes with tears on his face and apologizes For starting all the trouble in the first place. She forgives him and hug. All the parents in the neighborhood who kids she helped both the streets for decades show up and bring her flowers and thank her. Her entire hospital room is full of flowers and balloons and get well cards. The boys are all found.
Tina comes out of the hospital and goes home and is recovering nicely. Upon arriving home she sees that the neighborhood has come in and cleaned up all of the mess replaced everything that was broken including a cookie jar that the six younger boys made her in our class and has all of their signatures on it. Her pictures have been reframed and matted and look lovely. There is a digital frame that some of the parents pull together to get her which has all of the pictures scanned into it so she never has to lose them or worry about them ever again. Along the side of the pictures of her husband and her throughout the years are now pictures of all of the kids she has helped. Going as far back as the 60s and 70s. There are pictures of the boys playing baseball across the street when it used to be a dirt lot before it was the gas station pictures of the boys and girls married and their children. Pictures of them graduating high school and Miss Tina standing next to them with a big smile on her faceshining with pride.
During the cleanup project to community realized just how much she cared and how many lives she had helped with her kindness and her refusal to judge anyone based on how they looked the color of their skin.
The small time crooks have been held in court and they are about to be arraigned and they’re going before the judge and journey. The whole neighborhood wants these boys to have serious punishment for what they did to such a sweet old lady. But Miss Tina has a different plan. She knows that they are just troubled And need an opportunity to show that they can be different and be a positive impact on the city of New Orleans instead of drain it.
She shows up to Court the day that the boys are supposed to have their arraignment. She tells the judge not to go harshly on them. And offers a suggestion of them working within the community to help The younger generation to stay off the streets. She suggest job Corps or the OTC program for the boys the judge ask the boys what they think about the suggestion and they are all very ready to agree they’ve been in jail now for enough time to detox off of drugs and they are all saying things a lot more clearly. So they agreed to go into a Bootcamp program Where they have the option to go to the military.
Missy each one of the boys through their graduations she gets letters from the boys that had broken into her house who are all now serving in the military and living fine upstanding citizens lives. She dies in her sleep in her home and there’s a beautiful scene of her husband showing up And she is back to being her youthful self and he tells her that she’s needed elsewhere her job is done. She jumps up and runs over and hugs him he spins her around and they go into the light together.
Opens up in a History classroom with James who is now a high school history teacher And he has just finished giving a lesson about how one person can make a difference and Unite a community and that ripple effect could change the world.
As students all pay a lot of room there’s one kid still remaining. He looks like the rough and tumble type very similar to what James and his friends look like back in the 90s. I think your stories bullshit.
James simply stands up from his desk walks over to a file cabinet where sits on top of the file cabinet is a cookie jar with a bunch of signatures on it James takes the top off and the jar says wanna cook and takes and James sits down and then across the student and says do you wanna talk about it and this is the end of our story
